Crying Clowns

Rhyming words...

The bricks are laid
And the pieces set.
Gentlemen,
Come place your bets!

The women they
All look so fine!
The monks are here
They've built a shrine.

I hear the train
Rolling on down.
I see the troupe
Of crying clowns.

They scream my name
And cry for help.
The otters,
They all search for kelp.

I can't stop grinning,
Don't ask why.
I don't even know
Why I hardly try.

The girls all call
My name out loud.
Of my love affairs
I'm not too proud.

For some,
There is meaning in all.
But for us,
Nothing to do but fall.

Author's Note

I think I've been listening to too much Bob Dylan...

Reviews

[Melanie Genevieve]

LOL keep listening to Bob Dylan! teehee! Great write :)

[one sky]

Superb!
You have a nice inspiration. Love the ryhme and rhythm.

[Firestone Feinberg]

I don't think there's too much Bob Dylan. The man is a genius and you honor him. This is a terrific poem. The ending echoes in my mind. David

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i was humming a dylan tune while reading.


"buckets of rain, buckets of tears, got all these buckets coming out of my ears, buckets of moonbeams, in my hand. you got all the love, honey baby i can stand!"

[Will]

He's one of the greats, as both a poet and musician. Thanks for reading.

[Daniel Eckert]

A very entertaining and amusing poem. I love it.

[Baby Ricochet]

Goddamn crying clowns with pockets full of kelp. I hope an otter bites one. Always be proud of your love affairs, except the one's when you were shitfaced. Ya might not wanna mention those. Fun poem.

[Rita L. Sev]

Life is a circus, full of those crying clowns! Great job with the metaphor, and well done with the rhyme!

Rhythm is good too, though I feel like there are some syllables that could be eliminated for the sake of flow.
Last line, second stanza - "and" is not needed; stanza 5, "me".

[s y e]

I loved this, it was really well written and all the little rhymes were amazing. (:

"The girls all call
My name out loud.
Of my love affairs
I'm not too proud."

We all make mistakes, right? We all have things we're not proud of but we learn from them.

~ Noodle.