and i know there is that side of my mind..like the woods, behind my house...i have those also...real woods and metaphorical woods.
and i am not afraid...to go there...literally or figuratively..
at least i don't think i'm afraid.
chilling piece, and so thought provoking...i really like the conciseness of this and how it lets us roam.
Posted 11 Years Ago
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11 Years Ago
What a wonderful review! Thank you so much! I am very pleased that you perceived this in a metaphori.. read moreWhat a wonderful review! Thank you so much! I am very pleased that you perceived this in a metaphorical sense as well. You've made me happy. :)
Captivating ending. I would love a diff word than "big" to describe the dogs though. What makes them so scary?
Posted 12 Years Ago
12 Years Ago
In my mind I just thought that big dogs barking in the night, when it's really dark, and the kid's a.. read moreIn my mind I just thought that big dogs barking in the night, when it's really dark, and the kid's alone in their room. I just thought it'd add to it.
What a great poem about such a powerful force that lives inside us day after day. You really brought me back to my past and the most frightening things in it.
I couldn't help noticing your line structure. I found it most interesting that on some lines, you seemed to press enter a word early:
"I can feel my eyes wide with
fear, the covers up to my
ears, but I can still hear them."
I figured this was to keep the fast pace going as the lines demanded no stop and it was an absolute perfect effect. Whatever inspired you to do that is a piece of amazing.
Another great job.
Posted 12 Years Ago
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12 Years Ago
"A piece of amazing." I like that :P Actually, I wasn't really planning on writing the lines like th.. read more"A piece of amazing." I like that :P Actually, I wasn't really planning on writing the lines like that. I never really plan how I write my works, it just happens. Sometimes I tweak, but that's very rare. I didn't plan on rhyming them either. I am really glad you enjoyed this piece. It was fun to write.
Though they might seem frightening, the owls really only bring enchantment and protection. :p anyhow, great poem, it's very haunting and has that off key in the back that raises the hairs on the nape of your neck while reading. Awesome job!
Posted 12 Years Ago
12 Years Ago
Owls are enchanting, don't take that the wrong way. It's just meant to mean that in a dark room with.. read moreOwls are enchanting, don't take that the wrong way. It's just meant to mean that in a dark room with the sounds of whispers and scraping branches, to a little kid, and owl doesn't help matters any. :P That's all. I'm glad you liked it.
12 Years Ago
haha, yeah, I know xD don't worry, even if you didn't mean it like that, I wouldn't take offense. :p.. read morehaha, yeah, I know xD don't worry, even if you didn't mean it like that, I wouldn't take offense. :p and it's amazing!
I can still remember curling up in bed with my fingers in a cross, in case the vampires came in......IMAGINATION is a wonderful thing once you can take control
I am 33. I am gay/non-binary. I started writing in 8th grade. The person whom I started writing because of, I never got a chance to thank. We were never good friends, but we knew each other. I owe her.. more..