Caught

Based on a story I once read.

Faster.

I need a faster way

Out of this whole hole;

My grave.

Sinking deeper still.

Even deeper;

Past yesterday’s feelings

Into today’s soot.

Still waters

Cover faces worn

By rain.

Sitting on tailcoats waiting

For trains,

It’s a cold day, bundled up…

Shadows meet ‘neath

Tree’s faint sights.

Ringing. Faster. 

Author's Note

All of my poetry comes from the heart.

Reviews

[Just Another Writer]

I really enjoyed the imagery you put into just a few lines of poetry! There were so many spectacular visuals, and I absolutely loved your last line. I've always been a fan of prose poems, and this is a great one. :D Keep writing!

[Wild Willow Blue]

Thank you so much!

[Just Another Writer]

:) No problem!

[Layley Lu]

I feel this poem, inside out, and relate more than I want to. You wrote it well. Congrats.

[Wild Willow Blue]

Thank you so much. :)

[Acer]

Embers ain't cold yet. Nicely written.

[Wild Willow Blue]

Thank you so much. :)

[Acer]

My pleasure ;-'), very nice poem.

[Acer]

My pleasure ;-'), very nice poem.

[Acer]

My pleasure ;-'), very nice poem.

[Black Orchid]

This poem has a lot of emotion. I really enjoyed it.

[Wild Willow Blue]

Thank you. :)

[Trispanda]

I like the flow of this. As well as the visuals. :) I see you write a lot of poetry. Do you also write other things ?

[Wild Willow Blue]

I've tried writing stories, but I'm not too good at that. So poetry is all there is for me.

[K-mo]

this is simply amazing!

[Wild Willow Blue]

Why thank you!

[Tabitha t]

very nice. Beautiful and very crisp with clear imagery and a nice thought process. very clean. well done

[Wild Willow Blue]

Thank you!

[afra]

very dark and deep ...well done

[Wild Willow Blue]

Thank you!

[Odayin]

This one is just like thrown at the reader with force. It all comes out so quick and it leaves the reader asking for more--and knowing that there's a deeper meaning. An amazing mystery held in those lines.
It was all over in a second, I didn't really know what to do, except work at the meaning.
I would write what i found...but it was so long that I had trouble thinking it!
Great job!

[Wild Willow Blue]

I'm glad you enjoyed it. This piece is kind of short, but I meant it that way. In case you haven't noticed ( ;P ) I enjoy leaving space for the reader to ponder on the hidden meaning behind my words.

[Odayin]

Oh I pondered alright haha

[Trispanda]

that's always a fun thing for the reader.

[Owlgirl]

wow! This is very well done, I love the jaggedness, the torn, the fear. I love this. Amazing writing, the sensory images are wonderful. Enchanting piece you have here.

[Wild Willow Blue]

Oh, I'm so very glad you enjoyed this as well. That makes me so happy!

[Owlgirl]

You are an amazing writer!!!