So Happy I Could Die

just a short poem INSPARATION FROM LADY GAGA'S SONG SO HAPPY I COULD DIE i hope its not the same :)

So Happy I Could Die

 

When i am with you

I am so happy

So happy I Could die

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When I'm with you I'm

So happy i could die

i can love you for ever

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And that means i

would be with you and

that i'm s happy i could die

Reviews

[Hippy]

so far so good i think it may need a little touching up more words even like the first verse and the secound are identical except for the bottom line on the secound one and how u change i am to I'm i've been taught that stripping the repeation helps the flow of the poem but idk that could be how you want it. I'm not trying to be mean or dis your poem its just some good critism trying to help a fellow write get a little better