In the Name of the Father and the Son

A story of stress and hurt in a father-son relationship for the contest currently up on the site. Two archaeologists have troubles while searching for a lost treasure and must put aside their differences and work together, especially after the mother i

In the Name of the Father and the Son

Written by Kaleb Wilson (Kale)

 

INT. McMurry Family House - 12:06 P.M.

Phillip McMurry, and his son Jack walk down from their rooms upstairs arguing about their problems.

 

Phillip McMurry

What the Hell is wrong with you?! You're not going with me! Archeology is too dangerous for you, and I don't want you hurt, and imagine what your mother would do!

Author's Note

What in the story needs work?

Reviews

[Peter Grantham]

I feel that the father's dialog is a bit stiff. Perhaps you could work on that...