Possession

I wrote this in 9th grade and was suspended for 2 weeks. It's just part of a funny story I wanted to share.

If I were to release you

from this prison of flesh and bone

would you forsake me for another

could you forget its you I own

smoldering embers burn you

inside out I feed

scorching you with brimsone and ash

chanting an ancient creed

Reviews

[MIB]

I love this, for me it's the kind of poetry I like, flowing nicely and very well written, you've spent the time to write it, and it deserves a read... well done :D

[Mazie Tackett]

really creepy but its really amazing

[V]

Flows well! great imagery

[RachelReaper]

I love this, it gives me a feeling of an ancient ritual or spell and I really like things of that sort. Very dark and in its own way, very beautiful.

[OctoberDawn]

Great read, the somber yet flowing lines truly capture the dark and eerie essence of this scene. Looking forward to more of your writing!