Possession

I wrote this in 9th grade and was suspended for 2 weeks. It's just part of a funny story I wanted to share.

If I were to release you

from this prison of flesh and bone

would you forsake me for another

could you forget its you I own

smoldering embers burn you

inside out I feed

scorching you with brimsone and ash

chanting an ancient creed

Reviews

[Rob Santana]

Suspended for your creativity....that sucks!!! Well written

[WickedPenWielder]

Ah it didn't suck so much, I actually thought of it as a reward. :) Thank you Creeper!

[Katrina Mckeown]

great imagery, quite a powerful write about possession. Flows well also.

[WickedPenWielder]

Thank you! :)

[Sixella]

This was a truly amazing piece of work! I love the image writing and how smooth the poem flowed.

[deepblue04]

This is interesting. I like it! Theres one typo at the end you might want to look at. I think its "ancient" instead of "acient" isn't it?

[Btwixer]

I can feel the emotions. love the imagery of the smolding embers.

[Talismanic]

eloquent and :p , wimpy poetry i done think so

[Muse]

Possession.... is to give in completely. It's seductive and dark. We all wonder how it would feel to be possessed by another...but most of us are too scared to venture there.

[I Shred This Cabbage]

possession; a thousand years has it bore that name and a thousand and shall a thousand more! we as humans weep for the wedding day which was to be tomorrow. in the sorrow we hear our souls chant, let there be release, let there be release!

really beautiful, i look forward to more of your poetry if you post :)