Touch Me

Touch me with a candle,

     I'll still feel the burning flame,

Touch me with a knife,

     I'll still feel the searing pain,

Touch me with a spear,

     I'll still bleed all the same,

Touch me with a mirror,

     I'll still appear very plain,

Touch me with money,

     I'll still have little to gain,

Touch me with sickness,

     I'll still stand out in the rain,

Touch me with a cage,

     I'll still go insane,

Touch me with your heart,

     I'll not feel ashamed...

Reviews

[Brown Bull]

I hate it when a fly gets on my back where I can't reach him with my tail to swat him away. But I love butterflies and that butterfly picture is beautiful. Us bovines don't bother with mirrors too much, but I can sure identify with the cage line! Keep it up, you will be a good writer.

[Lorraine]

The repetition creates a feeling of quiet seduction while the tone remains steadily intense. Every line seems to be a silent scream filled with ironies. Your message comes off straight and strong even with just a few words.

Keep Writing. ^___^

[xxKrysti.Kittyxx]

This is beautiful. It's touching and relatable, to everybody. Great Job && keep writing =]

[Crow]

I really like this; the words offer the reader a fantastic imagery of life, and finally how love can change everything.

[Haifa]

Its good poem, I liked it and for most I liked is the ending of your poem. Well done

[The Analog Kid]

This is really good. Nice ending, but my favorite part was "Touch me with a cage,
I'll still go insane."

[B0Beauxs]

I was flicking through poems, and don't usually review them, but this is really incredible! It is so simple, so straight to the point, and so beautiful.

Amazing flow, powerful and simple imagery, just wonderful.

Means a lot to me.

[Jennifer Pennington]

Nicely done. Straight to the point. I love it!

[deeps]

I really liked this write, It is very well written.

[Liza]

you are a very insightful young lady - i like your simple yet profound style!