They Own You

They Own You

Smile;

You insignificant deceiver of existence,

-thief of reality,

Isn’t it what they all require of you?

Don’t they expect that?

Bow down to them,

They own you.

Smile;

You pathetic excuse for a life,

-thief of reality,

Isn't that what you have always done?

Don't you live off of your false perfection?

Bow down to them,

They own you.

 

Smile;

You impostor in the mirror,

-thief of reality,

Won’t they discard you if you don‘t?

Aren’t you frightened that they will abandon you again?

Bow down to them,

They own you.

 

Smile;

You hypocrite of passion,

-thief of reality,

Won’t you collapse if you don’t?

What if you shatter again?

Bow down to them,

They own you.

 

Smile;

You waste of space,

-thief of reality,

Isn’t that what you want to do?

So that you can protect what’s inside?

Bow down to them,

They own you.

Reviews

[FlawedByDesign]

Nice style and form. Sad to see the person is slave to somebody, but the truth is only weak people people succumb to the control of others.

btw...I do not understand how the questions on the 4th line of each stanza relate to the rest of the stanza, such as "Won’t they discard you if you don‘t?". How does this relate to the impostor in the mirror exactly? Is it a matter of "them" removing the mirror or the person "discarding" themselves by shedding the impostor image?

[TLK]

"...but the truth is only weak people people succumb to the control of others."

People succumb to control because of fear and pain. It is not a sign of strength to cause fear and pain to another, it is not a sign of weakness to feel it. You are wrong to that point that your comment would be taken by some as slanderous.

[ghostcar]

Great work! I love seeing this out there although I wish how I wish it wasn't true. And then you come to terms with our hidden nature. Only to be reminded by that that perfect piece. I read it several times as if I needed the flogging. Thank you for the great poem.

[Felicity]

very well done, love the rhythm of the poem.

[Anita B Jacques]

a awesome write, I love the phrase-thief of reality- so true, well done

[Sam Severn]

WOW!! This poem is exquisite! It's like you hold a mirror up to all our souls, n' shoot down our illusions with the mantra "Bow down to them/They own you." Drop-dead FANTASTIC!!! ㋡

[Dutch Jr.]

Reeeaalllyy good. I love how you parallel structured the poem, and reiterated the point to smile, and then describe the true reasons behind the smile.

[harman kour]

such an interesting write :) Loved the repetition in the poem... Lovely phrases and words used... Enjoyed it thoroughly Keep it up :)

[Matthew Ian Herrawood W]

Very iteresting piece. very good peace of writing. one that i like but honestly dont want to read again as for me it brings back bad memories and alot of anger

[aftervision]

this is a work of art my poet -- love the style and rhytme

[luvy]

wow. this is really amazing

[Nancy Lee Shrader]

beautiful! Congrats on your winning poem.