They Own You

They Own You

Smile;

You insignificant deceiver of existence,

-thief of reality,

Isn’t it what they all require of you?

Don’t they expect that?

Bow down to them,

They own you.

Smile;

You pathetic excuse for a life,

-thief of reality,

Isn't that what you have always done?

Don't you live off of your false perfection?

Bow down to them,

They own you.

 

Smile;

You impostor in the mirror,

-thief of reality,

Won’t they discard you if you don‘t?

Aren’t you frightened that they will abandon you again?

Bow down to them,

They own you.

 

Smile;

You hypocrite of passion,

-thief of reality,

Won’t you collapse if you don’t?

What if you shatter again?

Bow down to them,

They own you.

 

Smile;

You waste of space,

-thief of reality,

Isn’t that what you want to do?

So that you can protect what’s inside?

Bow down to them,

They own you.

Reviews

[FlawedByDesign]

Nice style and form. Sad to see the person is slave to somebody, but the truth is only weak people people succumb to the control of others.

btw...I do not understand how the questions on the 4th line of each stanza relate to the rest of the stanza, such as "Won’t they discard you if you don‘t?". How does this relate to the impostor in the mirror exactly? Is it a matter of "them" removing the mirror or the person "discarding" themselves by shedding the impostor image?

[TLK]

"...but the truth is only weak people people succumb to the control of others."

People succumb to control because of fear and pain. It is not a sign of strength to cause fear and pain to another, it is not a sign of weakness to feel it. You are wrong to that point that your comment would be taken by some as slanderous.

[An owl on the moon]

This is so well done. The form is visually stirring, and the words so emotionally gripping.. Powerful!

[Daisy123]

VERY powerful, really spoke to me. Great work:)

[The Analog Kid]

Kind of like a "Stepford Wife" coming to a conclusion about her existance. Nice use of repitition. Very powerful!

[Victoria Thornton]

Damn, it seems that from the beginning that you point out one flaw then you keep going till there is nothing left. I like it, it's amazing. Literally like nothing that I have ever read. Great job!!!

[Liza]

they own you...wow....that is very insightful on the masks we sometimes wear to keep others

[Nathan Durham]

This was a powerful piece. It used a lot of strong words. My interpretation of this is the people who sell out who they are to fit in.

[Ashesh]

It shook me!!

[Vember Judgement]

Woah, a lot of emotion in this one. A great read^^

[Luna Northstar]

Wow, amazing job. I love it!

[Kia-chan!]

Very powerful, very....hypnotic. Also, very good :)