They Own You

They Own You

Smile;

You insignificant deceiver of existence,

-thief of reality,

Isn’t it what they all require of you?

Don’t they expect that?

Bow down to them,

They own you.

Smile;

You pathetic excuse for a life,

-thief of reality,

Isn't that what you have always done?

Don't you live off of your false perfection?

Bow down to them,

They own you.

 

Smile;

You impostor in the mirror,

-thief of reality,

Won’t they discard you if you don‘t?

Aren’t you frightened that they will abandon you again?

Bow down to them,

They own you.

 

Smile;

You hypocrite of passion,

-thief of reality,

Won’t you collapse if you don’t?

What if you shatter again?

Bow down to them,

They own you.

 

Smile;

You waste of space,

-thief of reality,

Isn’t that what you want to do?

So that you can protect what’s inside?

Bow down to them,

They own you.

Reviews

[FlawedByDesign]

Nice style and form. Sad to see the person is slave to somebody, but the truth is only weak people people succumb to the control of others.

btw...I do not understand how the questions on the 4th line of each stanza relate to the rest of the stanza, such as "Won’t they discard you if you don‘t?". How does this relate to the impostor in the mirror exactly? Is it a matter of "them" removing the mirror or the person "discarding" themselves by shedding the impostor image?

[TLK]

"...but the truth is only weak people people succumb to the control of others."

People succumb to control because of fear and pain. It is not a sign of strength to cause fear and pain to another, it is not a sign of weakness to feel it. You are wrong to that point that your comment would be taken by some as slanderous.

[Jennifer Pennington]

Amazing piece of work i must say!

[Void Unspoken]

i agree. in quoting the inspirational lines... i'd quote your entire poem! LOVE IT! fantastic job!

[Rhine Wolf]

If i was to quote the lines that captured me, i would have quote the whole poem! Brilliantly inked! Blessed be Fallon

[The Tea Party Mouse.]

Oooh, I love this. It reminds me of that Evanescence song "Everybody's Fool". :D Very deep.

[KatiePie]

"Don't you live off of your false perfection?"
"You impostor in the mirror,"
"You hypocrite of passion,"
This was really wonderful, I mean WOW, from the beggining I could just imagine you reading it, dark poetry holds a sort of power, and one's like these, the one's that are dripping with soul, well.. they're practically a genre of their own with all the magic they contain in them.

Great write, keep up the good work.

[The Flawed]

very well done,
Well expressed

[kruizey2010]

WOW i love this its excellent

[Jessica]

Wow. The use of colour is amazing. This is pure genius. The image just seems to round it all off as well. Well done.

[Viola D'amore]

this is very good