They Own You

They Own You

Smile;

You insignificant deceiver of existence,

-thief of reality,

Isn’t it what they all require of you?

Don’t they expect that?

Bow down to them,

They own you.

Smile;

You pathetic excuse for a life,

-thief of reality,

Isn't that what you have always done?

Don't you live off of your false perfection?

Bow down to them,

They own you.

 

Smile;

You impostor in the mirror,

-thief of reality,

Won’t they discard you if you don‘t?

Aren’t you frightened that they will abandon you again?

Bow down to them,

They own you.

 

Smile;

You hypocrite of passion,

-thief of reality,

Won’t you collapse if you don’t?

What if you shatter again?

Bow down to them,

They own you.

 

Smile;

You waste of space,

-thief of reality,

Isn’t that what you want to do?

So that you can protect what’s inside?

Bow down to them,

They own you.

Reviews

[FlawedByDesign]

Nice style and form. Sad to see the person is slave to somebody, but the truth is only weak people people succumb to the control of others.

btw...I do not understand how the questions on the 4th line of each stanza relate to the rest of the stanza, such as "Won’t they discard you if you don‘t?". How does this relate to the impostor in the mirror exactly? Is it a matter of "them" removing the mirror or the person "discarding" themselves by shedding the impostor image?

[TLK]

"...but the truth is only weak people people succumb to the control of others."

People succumb to control because of fear and pain. It is not a sign of strength to cause fear and pain to another, it is not a sign of weakness to feel it. You are wrong to that point that your comment would be taken by some as slanderous.

[Pete]

this is honest, full of emotion and very powerful. it speaks of a sad reality. great write. congrats.

[*~Kristy~*]

Thank you! I wrote this in high school, about 8 years ago. It's one of the poems I saved, because I still love it.

[Pete]

i think it is excellent.

[daninstockholm]

Interesting work, good look at all the things we hear that we are supposed to be, and do, and not be and not do,, I like!!

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they own you . only if you let them.

[Viper Phoenix]

nice

[Lorraine]

It's amazing how every stanza starts with the word "smile" and yet ends with a very bitter statement of "the own you". The repetitions were nice and untiring. Well done.

Keep Writing. ^___^

[Crow]

Nicely expressed, and the style in which you present this piece definitly works. Correct me, but it seems like you do not like what you see in the mirror if you must conform to what society expects of you.

Either way, I enjoyed this piece.

[Mind Giant]

Hey there kristy, how are you, I must be honest I like this piece, it flows just right, here comes the honest part...I dont understand it. could you please explain!

[J.M]

loving it, this is a very clever piece. I also like the way you have set it out - it seems very vivid and real. Well done.

[Zebra]

Love it = )........especially the concept. Don't stop writing........the only thing im not getting right at this moment is the part about the "thief of reality"........