The Glass Rose

 

The Glass Rose

 

He gently handed it over to me,

And brushed his lips against mine ever so galliantly,

I smiled into his deep unfathomable blue eyes,

But inside them I saw nothing but lies,

 

He said farewell and he just walked away,

My entire body got sick and swayed,

I counted the steps that he took,

And silently begged for just one last look,

 

His disappearing shape never turned,

My other half never returned,

I never saw him again,

I couldn't even call him friend,

 

The gift in my hand was beautiful and clear,

The glistening inside it was bright and sheer,

It wasn't like other roses, it had no scent,

It would never be wilted or bent,

 

But it could shatter and break,

So similar to me, who felt as though she were burning at the stake,

I held it to my heat and I began to share the pain,

Because all of those months had been in vain,

 

My tears dribbled down the glass,

But the tears they did not last,

I quickly wiped them away,

My body, getting shakier by the second, still continued to sway,

 

I threw the little glistening rose to the ground and it broke,

The tiny shards flew around the room like a puff suffocating smoke,

Inside I felt my heart and soul break as well,

And to the floor alongside the glass my body fell.

 

Shattering into tiny pieces, and floating around the room, invisible as a puff of suffocating smoke.

 

Reviews

[Eternally Elemental]

This is a fantastic write.

I loved the title to begin with. As you read it captures the span of every breath as heartbreak happens. So sad, but such an amazing idea.

I love the way you described the glass rose; "it had no scent,
It would never be wilted or bent".
I also loved the way you echoed the same ending with the rose by shattering along with it.

Very artsy, full of imagery. My favorite kind of poetry :D
Amazing.

[KairifulSorrow]

wow.... it's so sad and your emotions flow it actuallly reminded me of one my friends. except he left involutary. excellent. bravo.

[Dillon Cotter]

this is teriffic but really sad. the first stanza is really incrediable with a nice flow. amazing write!!

-Will

[Aimee Mahathy]

oh wow! This is great! =D