Never Going Down

Hate me,

Because this hate you gave me,

Hit me,

Right here for everyone to see,

 

What did I ever do to you?

Didn't we once promise to together make it through?

I see this writing on this paper,

I pray for there to come a savior,

 

I gave you my heart once,

Offered to let you just hold it,

But you threw it into the pool,

The one that prooved me a fool,

 

Why did it all come to this?

Wasn't there once a time when we were a gentle kiss?

Just stop leave me be,

I only want to be free...

Reviews

[Nicole]

This was really good..so powerful. O.o
The way people can relate to this, and the message within this poem makes it beautiful.
Really good write, although.. I think the first stanza where it says:
"Hate me,
Because this hate you gave me,"
If you said:
"Hate me,
Because this is the hate you gave me,"
It would flow better.
I don't know, its just an observation.

[mystic soul]

wonderful poem with a very good message ... you should move on , in your life... this poem is very good... you misspell one word in third stanza.... great work...