Chapter 1

Just an intro....getting the setting and stuff.......

I don't know why but I seem to have been asleep for a long time...at least that's what all these scientists keep telling me.  They were very clean and flawless looking with big color-tinted goggles or visors.  Some were even taking notes on me like I was some kind of lost link to evolution.  Others just stared blankly.  All of the metal walls around me had a shade of dark metallic blue and the doors were silver.  Just picture any futuristic show and trust me, they have it.  I even saw an open walkway across from the where I was standing and found dark-colored giant robots, resting.  With a humanoid design and with a stare that permanently looked serious.  Some of the robots had a strange symbol on a band on each left shoulder.  But a few were just painted pure white.  All I can guess is that the white ones were experimental and the ones with the banded shoulders were for the military.  Then someone got me out of my awe-inspired state-of-mind with shocking news to me.
 
"I'm in the year 3004?" I asked
 
"Yes and we just woke you up," answered one of the scientists.
 
I was just wondering how or why I would ever be even here but before I could ask, almost some of the scientists that 'welcomed' me, left.  But there was one person left and from the looks of it she's going to help me on my confused awakening.
 
As she leaned closer and said, "So, what do you think of this place?"  She was a tall, well built, pale woman with long wavy brown hair.  Two golden highlights framed her face, one on each side, just shinned under the lights above.
 
"Umm...I don't know, I'm amazed if that counts."
 
"follow me, I need to show you something," she noted and took me to this big room.  It was very clean and empty and it had a wide window, and a table next to it.
 
"Please sit down," she said but I was too distracted by the view after I sat down to even care if she was there.

I gazed out the window and saw these tall behemoth buildings and centers gleaming under the gray  twilight sky.  Everything looked humid so it must have been  raining.  I saw flying cars going around and into these buildings.  One got so close I can see each water drop that landed on it.
 
Then she snapped her fingers at my face, "Observation time is over.  Now do you see what I have here?"  She was holding a strange flashlight.  It was strange because there were two ends where the light would shine.
 
"Yes," I answered.
 
"This device is used to flash into the eyes to educate.  This invention has been used for over 300 years and historically removed any required school that you might have gone through."
 
"Wow...so are you going to flash me now or something?"
 
"Yes," and just like that she sneaked in the flash.
 
I rubbed my eyes from the surprise attack and I felt like nothing happened to me.
 
"What? That's it? I don't notice any difference," I complained.
 
"Well let it sink in and don't worry, it won't blind you," she said and added while looking at a holographic card, "So you have been cryogenically frozen for exactly 1,000 years and you still haven't freaked out from the greatly changed environment, good for you."
 
"Yeah, yeah, whatever."
 
"My name is Jayne Arron, and if you need anything, I'll be here to assist you." Then she left the room and some other scientists came in.
 
They looked excited to see me.  But they just still stared.
 
"What's so weird about me that you guys just stare?" I asked them.  It was starting to annoy me.
 
"We're just amazed that you've made it this far and well...we just haven't experienced something like this," he explained and then he leaned closer to me, "You are a rarity and we're just so very proud to bring you back and we apologize for making you feel uncomfortable."
 
"Okay..."
 
He then turned around to face the other scientists.
 
"Come on, let’s leave her alone now," he told them and then he led the other scientists out of the room and Jayne came back.
 
"I'll show you to your room now," she then led me through several hallways that had many scientists crawling around looking busy and holding holographic cards.
 
"Can I ask why I was frozen?" I just had to ask her because I can't remember anything about it.
 
"You were not frozen alive but you did die a long time ago in 2004 and were frozen instead of buried."
 
"Why?"
 
"Who knows?  Maybe your loved ones felt that was best."
 
"So…some people were right about the whole 'we can revive them someday'?"
 
"Well...history has made it hard for anyone to be brought back or cured.  It's very rare for you or someone to be brought back or even considered for the procedure."  She seemed to have a sad tone to her voice when she said that, "Well we're here."
 
She opened the door. "Any other questions?"
 
"Not right now..."
 
"Okay.  Good night.  Tomorrow is going to be...," she took a paused and looked up thinking what to say next, "an in formidable day." Then she left.
 
I went in.  The room wasn't much.  It had a bed, which was good to see something familiar but as I looked around I saw that the rest of the room was more different.  I found a hula-hoop sized ring stuck to the floor and a button on the wall next to it.  I pressed it just out of curiosity.  The ring lit up and floated over me instantly.  I had a change of clothes and felt like I just stepped out of the shower.  It was weird and a hologram popped out of the wall showing me the clothes that I changed out of above the button I just had to push.  It looked like if I needed to change back I can select it...from the closer.  Or at least I thought it was a closet.
 
It was a strange day and I was tired.  So I went to sleep wondering what will happen the next day.

Author's Note

OK I get it I skimp out on the details D: I don't know why that's just my problem....and I know I suck at grammar too....

Oh and every pic I post is DRAWN BY ME ^_^

Reviews

[Tara Murasaki]

When you have problems with something like grammar, the best idea is to get a beta reader. Their job is to mark the mistakes, and offer ideas for correction. This way, your writing improves before you post it. That, or wait a few weeks, and come back to it, and read it slowly, and correct it then. It is never a good idea to post the rough. you should revise at least twice before posting anything. But still, even with the mistakes, this is very good.

[FicWriter]

Very interesting idea. Your grammar isn't too bad, and actually details are tricky. You do need more in this story, but you shouldn't give the reader a complete picture down to the smallest detail. Remember that although you may be trying to communicate your vision of the future, the trick is to do that while leaving room for the reader to imagine the rest. That way, more readers will identify better with the story and you will gain a broader audience. So outline the general picture, detail the very important things, and leave the rest to the reader's imagination. Keep it up! You show promise.

[Malik Amandla]

This is intersetingm you do a good job of drawing in the reader. I was curious about the changes to the new world and I liked the new technology that was introduced. I would like to know more about the character physically and their mentality.