Veil of Negativity

Lift it and see what the world really has in store for you :)

Walking around town

 hiding a frown

 Forgetful of the invisible cover that takes you under.

 But realization of the world changes your word... 

Finally being able to know the reality you live in

 not just some cerebral mediocrity

 It may not be real, but you can feel the change that it brings 

just as you fling the veil of unvirtual fantasy and negativity 

And see the real world after the relativity you kept living.

Reviews

[modtoddinc]

Constructive criticism- this poem seems a bit scattered to me. I am not sure of its message. Obviously the lifting of a veil, but beyond that it is unclear. Watch for shifting tense in your sentence structure and be sure to use accurate word choice. Keep writing. Thank you for sharing your art.