The Lake

Oh the feelings that we hide and no one notices...

It's like you're drowning

But everyone around you is breathing

They look at you with puzzled faces on top of the water

but you keep sinking

You don't know how to get out,

the dark force fighting against you,  immobilizing you

You're down, it's over

You look like you're breathing. Sanguine even.

You look like you're breathing

The lake is invisible to the ones observing

but you're still drowning...

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

A realistic view on life in the poetry. I tell people. be careful, never know what someone is thinking and feeling.
"The lake is invisible to the ones observing
but you're still drowning..."
Each person can handle enough and can feel like you are drowning in bad thoughts and places. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Daisygirl]

You made the poem very real and applicable to many things. Well done!

[Nadia B.]

Very well written and good use of color so as to separate the different thoughts, you have indeed three poems here, the one in blue, the one in green, and then all of the text together. The blue discussing how you seem fine on the surface, the green displaying the true feeling inside, and the whole text showing both sides of the story. Makes me think of the media and how depending on the way in which a photograph is published a different story can be told. It also make think of a mask and how one has to break down the entire view and their own view before they can see the true feeling or the actual view of the person going through the problem. Excellent piece, thank you for sharing, may your life's lakes be shallow in depth so as to stand tall in, keep writing!

[JC]

deep, raw and real, has a profoundness and melancholy. beautiful.

[modtoddinc]

I usually am not a fan of the color scheme writing, but the choices you made here are very effective! Almost as if there is murky green seaweed pulling us down through the clear water as we read... excellent job! The poem is also very well written and wise. You continue to amaze me, both in life and with your pen. Also, superb vocabulary word: sanguine.

~Peace, Todd