A Journey to Realization

The rose's thorns are the key in protecting one's sensitivity.

Flowers grow through dirt as well

even me, as some can't tell

I thought I wouldn't grow back

after being stepped on, soon feeling black

Yet I've grown, flourished, as my thorns are sharp

after many, breaking my heart

The surroundings are amused by my beauty

But when I join them they abuse me

Plucking me

tearing me

piece by piece

Oh why can't we be in peace?

I understand I'm too protected

thorns injected

and my internal thoughts defaced

Now, I'm spaced and displaced

This, is to realize

That I must, dry my eyes

Not to hide my cries

But to rise

So I won't be the only one that dies.

Reviews

[RiverRei]

This is great :) Such an inspiring piece! I'm proud of you for being able to bounce back after being stepped on. I've had to do that too and it's not easy. Obviously this is something many can easily relate to, and I love that it's inspiring. Not something you see very often on this site lol. Thanks very much for sharing this with me :)

[sereenaoutloud]

Wow your rhyming i superb! This flow effortlessly from start to finish! A very self reflecting write! I really love your style and look forward to reading more!! :)

[dan]

TC, I love the pace of this piece and the rhyming which does not seem at all forced, but with a natural flow to them. I like this as a sort of self-evaluation, pensive and thoughtful and most importantly hones with yourself. Very nice job! take care...dan

[alf]

Hi Ava Hays. I like the poem. You are conveying the emotions you feel, so why do I get the feeling you are holding back? There is a hint of passion lying beneath the words, but, for me, they are not fully realized and if they were . . . Wow what impact this would have!!! I love how you have created this, don't get me wrong there, I would just like to see this re-written without restraint. Talent is looming here . . . please . . . give it full reign and make me feel what you only hint at. I hope that makes sense, for I feel there is so much more you could give, and I would really like to see that, alf

[AaronFreitas]

I love the descriptions you use in this poem... they provide
awesome imagery. Good work I enjoyed this poem :)

[Double T]

The poem is great! I love the way on how you use the rhyming and manage to do it in a way that seems understandle. I like it.

Writing 4.5/5

Rhyming 5/5

Metaphors 4/5

Subject 4/5

Theme 5/5

[Maumil Mehraj]

So beautiful! Feelings of being abused, of being protected more than necessary, of falling down, and yet rising again are portrayed beautifully..
Way to go
Maumil

[Coyote Poetry]

The poem is very good. The good description create visions and thoughts.
"Plucking me
tearing me
piece by piece
Oh why can't we be in peace?"
You create situation and struggle. I did like the ending. To rise again. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Jamestown]

Well written!
A piece with clear emotions and great imagery,
Thanks for sharing and b-blessed!

[wordman]

a write of true feelings,abused and used,your beauty draws
but your thorns protect