The Pretender

Take one look at me. What do you see? Go on... I won't judge.

Cherubic am I,

A-glow with innocence,

Stars in my eyes,

Smiling day in and out,

Laughing at every...

Unamusing joke you make.

I pretend unknown,

Under the radar.

Look at me,

Tell me what I am,

Name me what you will,

Anything,

I'll come to every call.

Give me a command,

Obey I will,

Unquestioning.

Indulge in my angelicy,

My fine act,

For as long as you can. 

Just wait awhile longer,

You'll see me,

You'll definitely see,

Me. 

 

Author's Note

A spontaneous poem I made. The words just came to me, I suppose. I'd appreciate some constructive criticism. Don't be afraid to ask me about anything you're confused on. Thank you!

Reviews

[Dean Kuch®]

I imagined a beautiful and brightly colored garden spider as she sits in her web, luring her unsuspecting victims close with her brilliance, only send them off to their untimely demise. I can not explain why this particular image 'POPPED' into my head... I suppose I'm just wired that way.
Liked this one!

[silver threaded queen]

Amazing work! Pain, and hurt radiate from this piece, poetry, an amazing vent for pent up emotions. Wonderful job.

[poeticpiers]

spontaneous poetry sometimes works better than laboriously constructed poems perfect in meter and verse. THis one certainly has
A lot of food for thought