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The first song I'd ever written

I would travel the world for you

Yes, a many splendid mile

If only I could spend with you, a many splendid while

What I hope to do is hold you

Just hold you for that while

 

Traveling with you is something I can’t wait to do

It could be car or boat

I know I’d float air

Float on air, without a care

I’d be with you no matter where

 

Being loved by you is a feeling beyond compare

All the judging all the negative thoughts, they just aren’t there

It’s because you love you so, and yes I am aware

So please, don’t ever leave me

This I could not bare

 

You are my love, you my world

I just don’t know what I’d do without you there

Reviews

[linda m. crate]

This is lovely, Alicia. I love the rhymes in this because they don't seem forced to fit the form, you make it work so effortlessly that it's beautiful. One small quibble, though, I'm not quite certain if you meant to put: "It's because you love you so" in the second to the last stanza. If you did, I apologize. Just didn't seem to fit. Otherwise, this is excellent work, Alicia. Wonderful work!

[Aubrai]

I simply love the poem. It has a smooth flow and an honest message. A larger font would be more acceptable. It's great, believe me. :)