I Cried Red

Wrote for an assignment for my class

I Cried Red

When I think of death,

I see cardinals flying in a graying cynical sky,

at a carnival that has been abandoned of the sane.

I see this all in a binding birds eye view 

But I feel as if my feet rest on the ground or I just wish they would.

It's all ironic, especially the similarity of life and death.

My grandmother, she took my life.

She took it with a breathless body on a limp hospital bed.

In this memory, all I could see were cardinals.

They flew out of her, like torpedoes in slow motion.

They came from her mouth, they came from her ears

And they rested on her skin egging me on, they edged me toward death.

As they laughed, as they flew, as I saw them, all I could see was red.

Red, red, red and a single blue. 

The blue of a tear on my mother's cheek, the blue of the idle bodies who watched.

And I started to cry, but unlike everyone else, I cried red.

Reviews

[The Twin Arenas]

I'd never thought of cardinals as a death bird before, but now I will.

[Ada]

I don't know if that's a bad thing or a good thing ..

[The Twin Arenas]

definitely good. good death symbols are great for the brain. make life more interesting. skeletons played out.

[Ada]

Then I am glad I have gave a symbol, that was the intent of my assignment as well
To make people feel how I feel about a certain thing
In which mine was cardinals

[The Twin Arenas]

totally radical.

[DoormanDan]

I agree with Jacob erin-cilberto when he says that this has a slight Stephen King atmosphere to it, only it has your own unique touch as well. This truly sent chills down my spine as I was reading it, and I really liked the ending. I give you three claps for this piece, it is written wonderfully, in my opinion :

[Ada]

Thank you!
I find myself to write romantically eerie things but
I don't know exactly how it turns out.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

this felt really stephen kingish....

like "the dark half"

wonderfully imaged piece...i saw them...i felt them.....

j.

[Ada]

Thank you for the review
Stephen King is a great comparison to me.

[~]

I wonder what the assignment was. the imagery blends beautifully, and the poem is well written.

[Ada]

For this assignment I had to channel an emotion from an object, I chose a cardinal, and I was suppose to make people feel how this object makes me feel.
Thank you for the review.

[~]

Ahh, thank you, now i will read it again :D

[Ada]

(: Thank you, I hope you find the cardinal makes you feel a certain something.

[~]

You did well expressing death through these cardinals. I can see the color coding now.

[Ada]

(: Glad you noticed.
Thank you.

[SuspectGray]

For Christians, cardinal red is the color symbolic of the blood of Christ and the hope humanity gained from his resurrection. Perhaps when your grandmother died you cried out the hope of an everlasting life hereafter

[Ada]

That's a great ideal.
Thanks for the insight.

[Chris]

Takes effort to think on demand, takes talent to react to others requirements.

This still has the aftertaste of real and not a hint of Memorex...

[Ada]

Thank you for the review
It is quite hard to channel something when forced.

[GiuseppesHeart]

how did the assignment go?
reads like a dream sequence in a bxw film that shifts into vivid red..
I think it must have impressed the class..
well put miss WhatAboutViolet.100/100

[Ada]

Thanks for reviewing (:
The assignment went well I got a hundred c:

[GiuseppesHeart]

now you got two