Kaleidoscopic Whales

Kaleidoscopic Whales

A Poem by Whales
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seeching is my word, I made it up.

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When I die,
I will be on my knees.
My arms will be stretched.
And I will be beautiful.

I will finally cry.
Seeching out my tears,
And no one will know,
Because I when I die,
I will die alone.

My family will already be gone.
Alone on my bathroom tiles.
My wonderful heart attack will take me away.

I know that I have lead a full life.
Everything I've done,
I've done with all my whales.
Hanging my lighthouse from my fan,
Blink to me I will live.

© 2013 Whales


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seeching is a good word, i think you should copyright it

maybe you can get royalties from it

Posted 12 Years Ago


I like it but a bit confused by it. The first stanza is powerful, I get a shawshank image. I don't get how this fits in with the rest of the poem though. Also this person has lead a full life yet only cries when they die. (I think its a beautiful idea that maybe this person couldn't cry and finally can during death giving a sense of fulfillment, that they could finally feel this intense emotion. However the wording doesn't seem to point strongly towards that. Is seething a typo? I don't know what that is. I like the family will be already gone, alone but it doesn't seem to fit with the poem. Overall, A lot of very beautiful lines overall it feels like it might be a few too many portions of poems stuck together into one.

Posted 12 Years Ago


Whales

12 Years Ago

i make up words in my poems so seeching is not but i guess your right with the too many portions

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Added on July 4, 2012
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Whales
Whales

Southborough, MA



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