Lavender Aoha Quietly

Like a lighthouse it flashes.

I see nothing but the blinking horrors

Of my mind

And of my life.

As the hurricane surrounds me,

I sit quietly with my cup of tea,

And sip gently and watch the world drown.

Calmly and collected I walk outside.

I embrace the hurricane like an old friend

I'm petrified that It will move.

But no one can stop me.

Author's Note

Don't forget to rate. I'm almost a top writer.

Reviews

[Allycat]

This poem has so much power and raw emotion. I especially like the title, it's very unique and eye-catching. Out of all the poems I've see of yours, this would have to be my favorite :)
Marvelous job!

[ewest1220]

Are you talking about the badge thingy? But anyways very well done very powerful and great job!

[Whales]

Badge thing? What's that?

[ewest1220]

In your comment you said you were almost a top writer are you talking about the award on this site?

[Whales]

Yea, guy

[Lena Rossmore]

This is so powerful! I really like it.

[Emily B]

so many people are scared because they don't understand how and what to see . . . there should really be a self help program for those who see in shades

it might save the world

[eglantine]

I'm not sure what Aoha is but the title sounds lovely and satine, like rubbing your cheek on a lamb's ear (the plant, not the actual animal, although I suppose that'd work too). Strong start, the middle is a bit wobbly, and then "I'm petrified / I see shades" is lovely. I do think you need the last line, but in a very different way. Instead of just blatently stating the speaker likes it, use an image that expresses such (great opp to use something lavender... look up it's properties?)

[Whales]

You're like the big sister of writing to me.

[eglantine]

:D

[Whales]

I worked a little more on it, and ill probably edit a bit more but what do you think of it now?