All these dead Hamsters

AJJ

And I'd like to build 

A giant machine 

That crushes the mountains and burns all the trees.

And grates at the hamsters and claw them with keys.

And shove them in wood chippers and make their brains bleed.

Because I want hamsters to suffer

And all the hamsters should scream.

They should all be smothered 

And blown to smithereens.

And I wana be

An eight legged spider

That hunts at the fly

And eats his fly eye.

And coils him up

And eat through his stomach 

And find some more flies

And eat all their thighs 

Because all the flies should suffer

And all the flies should cry

And all the flies should burn at the wing

Because I am a monster.

Author's Note

Reviews

[Catey]

You did a fabulous job with the word 'and'. The poem is great. The visual of the hamster makes me believe you don't like them. I liked the second part with the flies. I don't like them so you can tare them apart and eat them all you want.
Nice job with using elementary words in the poem. :)

[eglantine]

I, too, love teh word 'and,' something beautiful within its three-legged verbratum. I always enjoy reading your writing.

[Cristina Moldoveanu]

"In life, as in a football game, the principle to follow is: hit the line hard." (Theodore Roosevelt). Poor hamsters, they are like guinea pigs. I also think it is an error to point at a fly with a cannon. Your poem is wistful and wishful.

[Cosmic kid]

Very destructive and gruesome, it really portrays your attitude on life mang

[Emily B]

and then he takes a boat, over waves and through seas, and returns home to supper, something warm and comfortable, and crawls into a waiting bed and becomes Jonah's big fish in the deep deep

[FreeYourMind]

Undeniably dark yet great read.. once again, great job!