Hey Bulldog

I wake up, fully nude and wondering where the f**k I am

I recognise the smoke filled room and I instantly go numb

why the f**k did I go back here?

My head is heavy with alcohol and dirty memories

and there she is

she is wearing lacey underwear and a ripped t-shirt just covering her breasts

I can make out her tattoo on her shoulder

I know that tattoo so well

ugliest f*****g thing

she is smoking, dropping ash on the record player that she is stood over

and she turns to me

and smiles a dirty smile that I f*****g resent

don't you just love this song she says

I know what it is

Hey Bulldog by the Beatles

she has played this on purpose

f*****g witch

she starts talking about John Lennon

yes I know the f*****g story alright

I say to halt her

her hair is knotty and

hangs loose and dead

her eyes black with her

s****y makeup

ash drops on the disguisting carpet and then onto her foot

she doesn't even move

she hums along, no care in the world

f*****g witch

I put on my jeans and don't even bother looking for underwear

I focus on getting out and getting away

she starts to sway to the music, shutting her eyes

Hey Bulldog stops and she turns, putting it on again

turn that s**t off I snarl

she grins, sickening grin

I try and find my t-shirt

It's outside she says

you are a f*****g witch I reply

mmhm she smirks

I walk out of her place

she buzzes the buzzer

I answer it stupidly

she starts to sing Hey Bulldog

and I tell her to f**k off

I grab my t-shirt from the road

its cut and burnt on one side

sharpee marked

it says

love the witch x

Author's Note

Inspired by the song 'Kathleen'. Please let me know your thoughts and feelings when reading this and what impression you get of their relationship, the song and the characters- thanks!

Reviews

[Pete]

pretty good stuff. always interesting to get inside someone's head and read what they were thinking. i guess it could be worse - the flip side of that record might be, "i am the walrus" ... :)

[McBear]

This was very pleasing to read. (;

[Alex]

Thank you for the review!

[W.k.kortas]

The wise Baldacci has hit on something here which also struck me--it's raw, but not for the sake of being so, but something of an updated version of what was, on this side of the pond, known as "grit lit". It's highly visual and honest storytelling.

[Alex]

Thank you very much- grit lit... I like it!

[Roshan Nair]

great write, a delight to read, this ones intense, cheeky and fun. I think you get full marks on all those counts. It might appear long but the piece just slips through the eyes due to the way you've shapped it. good job! cheers :)

[Alex]

Thank you very much! I'm glad you enjoyed reading it- yes I did worry about the length so I relied on the audiences engagement for that one. Thanks again for your kindness, much appreciated!

[Olivia]

Your piece is really original. the reader gets such an interesting view. I like in the first line where you say "I wake up, fully nude and wondering where the f**k I am" This line was so raw and cool that I knew I wanted to read the rest.

[Alex]

Wow thank you very much! I'm glad you enjoyed it and that it engaged you- it means a lot. Thanks again for such a kind review, its really appreciated!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

wow this is an absorbing piece about regrets....and Hey Bulldog, from the Yellow Sub album---
an album that doesn't get much attention, although one of my favorite beatle songs written by George is on that --"all too much"

the bulldog never gives up or lets go...sort of like the witch in this scenario.

funny I would read this today...tonight in my class I am showing Across the Universe---

nicely portrayed.

[Alex]

Thank you, I'm very glad it absorbed you! YES, it is an album totally underplayed.
I love your thoughts as always, I never thought of that link- how accidently clever of me haha!
Ah a classic- Words are flowing out like endless rain into a paper cup, I wish you were my teacher!
Thank you very much for your kind review, always appreciated.

[Coyote Poetry]

A interesting tale. Good use of song and situation. I like the good description. Sometime best to get dress and run. I like the attitude and the strong ending. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Alex]

Thanks Coyote! I'm glad you enjoyed it.

[Coyote Poetry]

I did and you are welcome.

[MomzillaNC]

I think the shock value of the over used F-bomb is really the only point to this piece and completely detracts from an otherwise gripping tale. A judicious use of that term would have had far more impact. And, you need to give this one a mature rating before Admin takes it down.

[Alex]

I hope this didn't offend you, I did put a mature rating on this but I've had messages to take it off because not everyone can access it- I will be sure to edit it back in. Thank you for your thoughts, I do agree that I overuse swearing and I will be sure to spend time taking some out. On the other hand, I am an 18 year old teenager and I write about what I know which tends to be raw emotions, anger, first-heartbreaks etc. so I think some of the swearing is necessary. I'm sorry if you didn't like this piece but thanks for your helpful notes anyway!

[MomzillaNC]

Swearing can be effective is applied judiciously and with considered purpose. But, when a piece is peppered with profanity for the shock value, the profanity takes over the piece and the message may be lost.

And, regardless of folks complaints that they cannot read it, you need to follow the rules of WC. The Admin folks pretty much leave us alone but have been sticklers about the maturity ratings. My poem "Walking" had to be mature rated because of the subject matter.

[Alex]

I agree, I will be sure to change it around- thanks!

[MomzillaNC]

YW Happy to help.

[Calamity]

Really great poem. You could totally recite this is Slam.
I might just suggest a mature rating though for the use of language.
Some sites are funny about that.

[Alex]

Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed this.
How do I add a mature rating? I thought they were automatic but perhaps not-oops!
Thanks again for your kind review- much appreciated.

[Calamity]

You're welcome. It's where you choose audience.
I believe the options are everyone , mature and teens?

[Alex]

Oh okay, thanks for your help!

[Calamity]

You're welcome. :)

[Chain of Hearts]

This poem sounds so unique with its many words...I've read many poems and stories where the man is the mean and sly one, but in this poem I love how you showed how a woman can be as sly as a fox too. Very descriptive, a great piece.

[Alex]

I'm glad you found this unique- that's awesome! Yes, you understood the character's personality perfectly and connoted a man's traits onto her, I purposely gave her attributes of an unemotional and sly ex so that's great that you picked that up! Thank you for your time reading and reviewing and for your excellent thoughts- much appreciated!

[Chain of Hearts]

Welcome :) Check out my poems and stories and comment your opinion ;)

[Alex]

Yes of course, can't wait to check out your side of the cafe!