Cecil

Cecil jumps on pavement cracks

she says she craves bad luck

Cecil has long, dark hair

and she whips people with it

when she is euphoric with drugs

Cecil rips flowers out of the ground

and singes them with her tired lighter

she said she will not respect nature

as nothing respects her

Cecil tells me to stop being soft

and to run on stones with no shoes on

her feet are so bloody

and she says her outfit is complete

Cecil has lit a fire in her mind

and has put herself on it

she burned and burned

and nothing can resurrect her

Author's Note

This piece is simplistic so the basic narrative was intentional. Please let me know your thoughts and feelings when reading this poem, that is what I am really interest in. Thanks!

Reviews

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i feel someone who has lost faith in themselves...feels enough bad luck has befallen her that she can't have it any worse than it is..
i like the expression in this...might go through it and smooth the flow of it a bit so that it can build a crescendo up to that really excellent last line.

[Alex]

You understood Cecil perfectly. Thank you for your thoughts- I agree, I struggle with making my poetry fluent sometimes!

[I Am Svetlana]

I'm glad Cecil has a bit of a spark to her and how she's trying to tell others that it's okay to be bad sometimes, to let go and not care about everything. I'm like this most of the time, my two younger sisters are way more formal and shaped up. I'm the daughter with a free mind and not bothering to care about much around me. It's a good lesson that you teach with this piece, I admired it!

[Alex]

Wow, I love how you understood the character and her frame of mind! Yeah I guess it is good to let go of stress sometimes, the lesson wasn't intentional but I love it now you've embedded it- Thanks!

[I Am Svetlana]

You're welcome. My brother taught me how to interpret writing, like learn to critically think and stuff, to look at the bigger idea beyond the words.

[Alex]

Well it is a gift- hold onto it!

[kassystiletto-mermalien]

Your writing got to me , mainly with the stones idea . It really showed the lengths of the writing and to where it goes. Very very good :) thanks for the request !

[Alex]

Thank you! I'm so glad that it stayed with you, thanks again for your thoughts- much appreciated! No problem for the request- I enjoy your writing :)

[Laura Lynn]

"she says she will not respect nature" and "she says she craves bad luck" are my favorite lines

[Alex]

Wow thank you, I'm glad they stood out for you. Thanks for your thoughts- much appreciated!

[JC]

One of my favourite reads in awhile, whether Cecil is real or fictionalized I sense a person burning with abandonment, with reckless pain inside, the tormented mind and soul of an artist running barefooted and being beautiful by being ugly...this really spoke to me...thank you....

[Alex]

This is perfect! I am thrilled that the poem spoke to you, that is the only reason I write- to capture a feeling in the reader. You truly got who Cecil is and I didn't even have to spell it out for you to get a sense of her loneliness which is awesome! Thank you deeply for your thoughts on this piece, I am so grateful!

[...Relic...]

It sounds like Cecil has problems she can't overcome. Her self-esteem is in the toilet and she craves self-destruction. There's a spooky kind of feeling to it really. Hope that makes sense.

[Alex]

YES, I'm very happy you got that feel to the character. Thank you for sharing your thoughts, you understood perfectly- I'm glad it was spooky for you in a weird way, thank you again!

[...Relic...]

My pleasure. If I have any nightmares I'll blame you. Lol

[Alex]

Haha- at least you will remember my writing!

[...Relic...]

Oh yeah, at least for the whole next morning anyway. haha