Shame

Shame

A Poem by Alex

she used to f**k men for money and fame

she used to f**k men for money and fame

she used to f**k men for money and fame

until she hung herself because of the shame

© 2015 Alex


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Yeah, you're absolutely right. 'Shame' could be replace with 'Blame'. However, whatever you've already pen`d is very deep so, I ain't think, there's any need to replace it, but... you can add one more line .. which's end with the word 'blame'. You're damn breathtaking & as creative as a muse of a thin one so..
... would like to show you another angel of the write if you ain't mind.. I'll show you two versions of the write. It depends which one you appreciate. Have a look below:

Ist version:
"she used to f**k men for money and fame
she used to curse 'em just with an aim
Oh yea..
she used to f**k men.. Ooo--Ooo
men.. men... men
she used to f**k men for the glory and reign,
but what she got just pain in the rain
Oh yea..
~~ Sing with me~~
she used to f**k men..
men.. men.. men.. Oooo--Oooo
Just for the money and fame
until she hung herself, cause of the shame
Oh.. this shame~~ unbearable pain
Now she used to blame...
that..
she used to f**k men for money & fame
until she hung herself because of the shame.

IInd version:
she used to f**k men for money and fame
she used to f**k men for money and fame
she used to f**k men for money and fame
until she hung herself because of the shame
So, when she bleed.. then she claims...
she used to f**k men for money and fame
until she hung herself because of the blame.

Nevermind.. It was all my thoughts were on your pretty cool poetry. You're oneself a white one.. aren't ya? Well, .. good by me. Anyway, i'm heading on to check out your poetry!

Posted 9 Years Ago


Alex

9 Years Ago

Of course not, anyone's words are appreciated by myself as it only makes for better writing! Haha I .. read more
Arsh

9 Years Ago

Really? Well.. even the drug, the heat of violence &, of course, a very pleasurable sex... that belo.. read more
Alex

9 Years Ago

I guess it can be white as well as black! But, exactly- it all depends on 'who'. Thanks for all of y.. read more
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JC
Again, you delve into the tormented, seemingly simplistic but utterly profound.

Posted 9 Years Ago


Alex

9 Years Ago

Thank you very much! This piece of writing is probably my least favourite- on the verge of being del.. read more
JC

9 Years Ago

Kerouac said something like First thought, pure thought...or to that idea...it's there, created alre.. read more
Alex

9 Years Ago

That's a great idea, I may just do that!
Short piece that reveals a lot of pain and suffering. I applaud your straightforwardness. Well done.

Posted 9 Years Ago


Alex

9 Years Ago

Thank you very much, yes I am quite straightforward- perhaps a little too much haha! Thanks again fo.. read more
You've conveyed a powerful message in these four lines.
It flows well, and dissects as issue we should all spend some time thinking about.
Keep up the great work.

Posted 9 Years Ago


Alex

9 Years Ago

Thank you for your thoughts and encouragement- it means a lot!
oh yeah, I don't know how deadly, but it is a true threat to one's spirit putting you through the wringer. Basically, feeling that judgement feels destructive, but then if things are going better it ends up being better in the end? I don't know. But I felt ashamed for not receiving love, which is weird because I was very interested in love, but I didn't deserve the kind of love I was searching for at that time because I needed to see what life was like? I still feel upset about it, but there is no other way to achieve understanding I guess and all must go through these judgment cycles with people, it really should be sort of interesting. I'm not sure I'm all keyed into the hanging bit, but it is dramatic. Maybe you would not get our attention unless it was extreme like this.

Posted 9 Years Ago


Alex

9 Years Ago

Thank you for sharing your thoughts and experiences, it is all really helpful. Yes, I am quite a blu.. read more

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Added on December 2, 2014
Last Updated on January 13, 2015

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