Bathroom Floor

On average, 2 women a week are killed by a current or former male partner.

he leaves her on the bathroom floor

with bloody rag of lip and jaw

when he returns with an intoxicated arm

he uses it to conduct more harm

once on the bed she begs for demise

as he routinely accuses her of lies

she gets ripped and gnawed and cold and dirty

I have no choice but let him hurt me

Author's Note

I wanted to write a realistic piece on the beautiful women who have to endure abuse and sexual violence.

Reviews

[Bohrium Guy]

I think you done a fine job at capturing the essence that you intended to display. Your imagery is very nice and your message well felt. Great job and thanks for sharing!

~Rob~

[Iris]

This was good Alex. We all like our fantasies but getting pulled back into the real world is much needed some times.

[Neville]

If that was your aim, you have succeeded - I work on a daily basis with such victims...Actually, I only work Fridays these days since I have effectively retired......write on

[Alex]

Thank you for your kind review, it means a lot. Wow what an inspiring job, very sad but rewarding I hope!

[Neville]

Cheers................................

[poetry-kiddo alienbaba]

hauntingly passionate drama on the bathroom floor
cant let him leave; cant let the self go

deeply intellectual

[Alex]

Thank you, what do you mean can't let him leave and cant let the self go?

[poetry-kiddo alienbaba]

i will not elaborate but rather leave it to your imagination ...
pls carry on writing...u r good really

[Alex]

Okay as you wish- thank you for your kindness!

[poetry-kiddo alienbaba]

'-'

[Ed Fagan]

I am not sure why I am reading write such as these this week. I recently read about a cutter. The woman I knew lost her virginity in this manner which ultimately lead to such. Sad.

[Alex]

I'm sorry to hear this, truly. I'm glad you felt the emotion of the poem- thanks for the kind review.

[KeeD]

Its like a sinking feeling when you realize that the author speaks about herself, a cry for help..a moment of stillness just takes over followed by overwhelming rage, heartbreak, sadness. Then we move on, we ignore, we forget.. we're human again. In that moment when I read your words I'd like to think we're something better, something different, something that could actually make a change. Maybe in a parallel universe. Great poem, I can't say I enjoy writes like this because its sad that this topic has to ever be covered but I enjoy writes like this for you capture the brutality of the situation and the tragedy of it all. Whats one more brick in the wall..
Great poem, omg I'm like starting to fanboy your writing..

[Alex]

Haha! This did make me laugh- please keep fanboying- its an honour! I know its weird but I'm glad it made you sink, I tried hard to capture the emotion in such a short and precise story so I'm really happy you felt the words. Wow, your thoughts on the piece are just amazing, thank you so much. I think I owe you some reviews now! I appreciate your time spent reading and reviewing again, it is so lovely of you and really means a lot to me so thanks! Alex

[Jamie]

Such a brutal write and an excellent read! Great job!

[Alex]

Thank you very much, I'm glad you felt the poem and its savagery- your review is much appreciated!

[Jamie]

You're welcome :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

this is written from the gut...and the theme is ugly...i would like to put this man's head through the bathroom mirror...
that last line is so telling...many who suffer abuse think that it is their fault...and that is the worst tragedy of it all.

[Alex]

Yes! I strived for ugly and I'm glad you felt emotion for the character's considering their lack of description. Thank you for understanding the underlying message of the poem being the emotional scarring as well as the physical suffering, much appreciated.