Always Read The Laybull

My current frustration with the current affairs and how we the people are deceived, misinformed and lied to.The destruction of nature and the genocide and massacres of indigenous peoples.

            Always Read The Laybull

 

written by Ian Joseph Brown ®©™

 

 I'm an outstanding 'this and I'm an influential 'that I'm far superior than you, your a twat, 

Im a plasterer, a master of cast, your a f****n pervert with a shady past,

 Yeah but I'm a Knights Templar and Im a Rotarian Freemason, your a w***e to the Crown and the Vatican Monks gayest son,

But I am a Free Man of the land, autonomous and sovereign, your Tim nice but dim who fingers your own s****y ring,

 I am this many years old ,I am this many years young, your casting a belief spell can't you see its dumb?,

I'm an electrician known as a 'spark , your a f*****g b***h owned by the 'Arc

 I am your local council and president, your a worming snake that's evident,

I'm a doctor I heal the sick, your a big pharma b***h injecting toxic s**t,

 I'm am tax exempt, known as a banker, but in reality we all know your a f*****g wanker,

I'm a pope and i wear white, think's he divine but really chats shite,

 I'm a law abiding citizen and I've had the jab, now your rendered asunder and that is so sad,

I'm am the Prime Minister and I make the law, your a f*****g nonce that uses tor,

 I'm a charity giver, I am most certainly not a c**t, but the fact is your a cerebrally corrupt degenerate runt,

Perhaps I am unique, perhaps I am original, having common sense does not make me a noble?, 

So much love i have for the beautiful women, never would I pay so dont be billin';

 I dont hate on gays ,I just dont like bent men and they dont like me because I'm staight up with 'em, 

I know the difference between good and bad holes as I am aware the earth does not have poles,

 We say "up north" and we say "down south" are you aware of the bullshit that comes out your mouth,

If i can, I will help, I don't need paying just gimme a yelp, 

As I do know evil because it knows me, it sent to jail but now I am free,

I got married to a b***h unkind, now divorced with my liberated mind,

To the men of the world I ask you abrupt, sort yourself out and wake the f**k up !

Author's Note

yes its crude, but i needed to say it

Reviews

[Carlos Lorenzo Estrada]

Crude, passionate, raw, and truthful. This poem burns with an honest rage that speaks to and for the like minded. I have always believed that poetry written from the heart is exceptional art. It may not be pretty or perfect but it is damn right true. A strong piece of writing. Thank you for sharing your art with us.

[JayG]

• I'm an electrician known as a 'spark , your a f*****g b***h owned by the 'Arc

Seriously? I’m both an electrician and an engineer, and in more than 60 years of actively working as one, I’ve heard not one person call an electrician a “spark.” Nor have I ever heard a company called: “The Arc.” But you felt you needed a rhyme, and so, you made one up and shoved it in.

But forced rhymes, as you’ve done so often here, don’t work because they’re as pleasant, as obvious, and, as overused as Moon/June. And since you’ve used none of the other techniques or norms that go along with rhyming, those rhymes don’t contribute, they detract.

Another problem is your rage. The words make the page, sure. And when you read them the emotion is there in your voice and your mind. But only you know how you-want-it-read. The reader, unlike you, doesn’t know what the line WILL say, or what drove you to say what you did, so they “hear” what should be angry words read in a dispassionate voice—and that can’t work. Dropping in a pro-forma curse or three on each line takes all the impact from them. As I used to tell my scouts, “Save something for when you drop a log on your foot.” A droning litany of such language defeats the purpose of using them.

Here’s the deal: There’s a LOT to writing poetry that’s not obvious. One is that while poetry is emotional, the emotion isn’t that of the author, it’s the emotion you evoke in the reader with your words. So here, where you make endless accusations, reacting to things the reader is unaware of, what can the reader respond with but, “Uhh…okay.”? The idea is to make them react, and supply that curse, in support. And that takes a very different approach, one that’s emotion, not fact-based.

One thing that can help is to edit not from your chair, but that of the reader, who arrives without context, and zero knowledge of your intent for how they’re supposed to react. They need 100% context as-they-read a given line. So you either evoke or supply it, or, the line is meaningless to anyone but you.

Head for Amazon, and read the excerpt to Stephen fry’s, The Ode Less Traveled. I think you’ll find what he has to say about the flow of language very useful. And check a few books on the techniques of poetry. Not a damn thing you were given in school about writing technique works for poetry or fiction, because it’s all designed for nonfiction.Use it for poetry and what you get reads like a report.

Sorry my news wasn’t better, but I thought you might want to know, because you can’t fix the problem you don’t see as being one.

[Gee]

Over in the UK all construction site electricians are called Sparks or Sparkys, has been this way forever :)

[JayG]

And you posted this on a UK website?

[TaffRaff]

A typical long winded review from an academical. Labelling himself an "electrician and engineer" "scout leader" Any electrician worth his salt knows that an "arc" is the visible light from one pole to another, also arc welding. Also as confirmed by the lady here who as a non-electrician knew exactly what a "spark" nickname was. What is clear is this person was offended by the content of truth herewith so used his best efforts to ridicule said article, even going as far as promoting Stephen Fry, absolutely shameless and despicable behaviour we all now have come to expect from these "know it all" types whom love to reference the labels that elevates them to a god-like status but forgets that he is just a living man, like myself too am "a man" but a man who will never proclaim to be a better man than any other. It is apparent that some men believe in the titles and labels are bonafide.

[JayG]

• A typical long winded review from an academical

Sorry, kid, but I have no degree, nor do I work in academia. So you haven't taken the time to learn aqny of the basics of poetry, and you're not all that good at analysis.

• Any electrician worth his salt knows that an "arc" is the visible light from one pole to another, also arc welding.

Sorry child. I know what an arc is, but you said an "electrician known as a 'spark," So you didn't even read the poem you posted, which according to "written by Ian Joseph Brown ®©™" is plagiarized work. So you didn't even read the thing.

It's really simple. If you want better reviews, either post, "Praise only," or, better poetry.

[TaffRaff]

i couldnt give a monkeys a*****e what "the basics of poetry" are. I have used welders arc and mig many times. the passage is about LABELS and how everyone acts up to there so called titles like ELECTRICIAN who in the uk we say SPARK as in "oh that wiring looks complicated you'd better call a Spark in for that" and my refrence to ARc meant as Electricity what all Life IS , like its a Godly force of nature , the whole poem is about how NOBODY IS A LABEL OR A TITLE just A Man or woman , and how some men think they are have some superiority because they have a label or title like for ONE skill they think they are experts but few really are , and i apologize for my incorrect assumption that you was academic or trying to be a smart a*s. Now you can see my profile picture as it is displayed by my work so your passive aggressive insults at labelling me a child and a bit stupid for not reading my own work, was a direct personal attack and sly attempt at assassinating my character, I respect any criticism but I really don't think you understood the nature of my writing, but Carlos understood it completely and his first language is not even English !! If i had to label you I would label you "an unhappy and troubled man" who most probably still lives at home with his mother and dreams about shagging her, correct?

[JayG]

• i couldnt give a monkeys a*****e what "the basics of poetry" are.

And it shows. seven months after posting it, those who looked at felt it lacking, as well. In fact, of all your writing posted thus far you have only 1 comment, total, aside from mine.

• the passage is about LABELS

That was your intent. But intent doesn't make it to the page. It's all about communication. And if the reader doesn't get it, you don't blame them because clarity is your job, and you failed at your task.

You don't become an electrician without work and study. why would you assume that you're a poet without learning any of the basics?

Bottom line: I made some suggestions, which you are free to ignore. But becoming angry at me because you're not getting the praise you want is not the best way to improve. You want better reviews? Take steps toward writing better poetry.