Ode to the Beast

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Iused to Love the aloof Autumn Breathin'

I used to Stroll towards tales of a horizon

With vain eyes I had mocked your greevin'

 

I once Clawed the hand that fed me

I once adorned a memory that

Departed with no dignity or charm

That would not stay

Within albums or warming palms

 

God bless the ignorant and the simple-minded

That care not if her

golden strings of hair were binded

God bless the ugly and the poor

That find in kindness beauty and silver-ore

 

I used to wait for my limbs to swell

Into reds and blues as tearful clouds fell

I had carved pillars of dirt and ice

For a home that would not suffice

 

I used to admire the cold that brings

Omens and prose and sunless noons

 

Nowadays I mourn the undead spring

Of barren friendships in diseased cocoons

Author's Note

*Image Title: Beauty and the Beast
*By: zirofax
*Link to page: http://browse.deviantart.com/?qh=§ion=&q=beauty+and+the+beast#/d2vbfx9

Reviews

[Castonovia]

Rare language nowadays forgotten and laid to the dust of time, carted away by the wind... truly brilliant with vivid imagery and powerfully written tales of disallusion :) Reminded me of The Odyssey somehow except shiver envoking, added with a twist of the Grimm fairytales, dark and equally beautiful, well penned indeed!!!

[Ana Drake]

That was absolutely beautiful. I knew I'd love this as soon as I read the title, and I do. Let see, wheres that 'next chapter' button... Oh there it is! :P

[YouoweYoupay]

Thank you for the comment, I'm glad you like this piece cuz I do too. Do you review stories? I was wondering if you can take a look at my work still under construction, a book I started on a whim, loved it and enjoyed writing it, and now Im going thru it agen and see how it could end. It could really use some constructive reviews. It would be nice to exchange book reviews, but ofcourse it's up to you. I will still read 'Wicked' even if you do not take a look at 'Snowdrop'. You had me thinking about poor Kesha! Where will she go next, I wonder. Peace.

[Ana Drake]

Lol, I think I can do that :)
Promise, I'll read a few chapters today and tell you what I think.

[Rick Puetter]

Dear YouOweYouPay.

"I used to Stroll towards tales of a horizon"

What a marvelous phrase and summary of disheartedness. Really quite good and it sets the tone for the piece.

"God bless the ignorant and the simple-minded". 'Tis a blessing to be simple! This, combined with the other phrase mentioned above are the meat of this piece and tell so strongly of the often bitter taste of reality. Oh well, let's sweep that thought away for as long as we can.

Another nice one. Insightful. Greatly enjoyed.

Best regards,

Rick

[Day]

this is a great story with strong word choice. I especially like the last four lines; dark and beautiful.
(just a note, the third line I think you mean grievin')

[AgMoore]

fantastic spin on this classic tale I love the story book feel and the dark eerie musings are I believe how a true rendition of a Grimm classic should be written, not Disney and posies but dark and very human like life truly is... Kudos on this!

[J. R.]

This was very strongly worded.
A sorrowful ode to disillusionment

[fireblossom]

Character development. Well written. I enjoyed reading this.

There are many monsters. In the end most know who they are and what they are about.

[RainQueen]

I read this as a cry of disillusion, loss of passion.

"Nowadays I mourn the undead spring

Of barren friendships in diseased cocoons"

It ends with a gray thud, and that - sums up the sense of it absolutely perfectly. Incredibly evocative write~

[trainwreck]

Interesting perspective. I enjoyed the deep ideas you stated, and especially that the language was both full of images rarely seen, but also using simple English: "I once clawed the hand that fed me".The style is fairly unique as well. Thank you for sharing.