Impervious (for Matthew Kult)

a poem about obsession

 

 

The pretty girl owes what

She doesn't need to pay

His addicted eyes linger

At the victim in dismay

The screen meets his fingers

 

Her lovable smile eternal

Yet so far far away

The urge is deeply internal

 

All at once

Sweet, Bitter, and sour

His madness leading him astray

For a delicate, moist flower

In an untouchable bouquet

Reviews

[Matthew Kult]

Hello Wella,

We shall see how impervious you are my sweet. But I do love the response. You are like my a lilly so beautiful and delicate, but they eventually die. Will they have lillies for you?

I am coming Wella, I have no choice. You have been chosen....and I must do what my desires tell me to do. Then we will see how Impervious, too all of this, you really are. And when my thumb brushes your cheek and l look dead in your eyes for the first time, you will know....Death has come for you.

And hell followed with me.

Darkly and Eternally yours,

Matthew Kult

[T.S. Ulmus]

This poem actually made me feel guilty and kind of dirty. Good job! It's a beautiful write, good cadence, and rapping it up like you did is very punctual.

Obsession can be quite scary. It's intense and uncontrollable! Good portrayal.

[Dante Balsote]

Impervious see-through. :D

[Hush Hush]

Woow, a very strong poem Wella!

[hannahspelledbackwards]

I'm loving the rhyme scheme on this one. Very good write!

[Mauricio Montoya]

wow! excellent write.

[An owl on the moon]

You give us intimacy and distance merged into one... The desire to have someone just out of reach.. someone untouchable.. unreachable.. Powerful look into the psyche!

[Lauren Beth]

This is beautifully written, the rhyme really works. Love the last stanza...especially 'For a delicate, moist flower/ In an untouchable bouquet'...particularly enjoyed this piece having read Matthew Kult's preceding pieces. Nicely done!

[OR]

I like this part
"All at once
Sweet, Bitter, and sour"
No like is not the word; love is !
I love this !

[just rose.]

I like the structure of this a lot, carefully composed, great combinations of words. Lovely.