Purezento [A Present]

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Purezento

 

 

Do you have a clue what it feels like

To be given a fancy case

by a man with no face

 

a low flutter of tiny wings of silk

and a muffled welcoming giggle

 

To stare at it's sealed content

For so long...

The distance between

the ribbons of green

and your shaking hand

shrinks...

and expands...

 

Do you know what it feels like

to retreat quietly choosing

to stay hesitant

choosing not to choose yet

until the giggle inside the case

is muted...and it vibrates.

pleading voices spruce in place

 

and then a nudge or two...

 

Do you know what it feels like

to stand by the doorway

and watch the case

imitate all the other

non-living tools

in their silence

 

A Waste...

 

 

 

 

 

Author's Note

Image by: PinkFireFly

http://browse.deviantart.com/?qh=§ion=&q=present+box#/d2bodba

Reviews

[No use.]

mmm.. yes i do indeed know the feeling.. quite an interesting write indeed. i did stop , hesitate, to think

[Shellie]

well laid out piece, phrasings fab...especially the last stanza!! well done it was very good!

[Jonathan]

very nice I enjoyed the creativity of this write.
The image was created perfectly in my mind.

[Tomi]

Today, I confer on you the joyful writer of sad..lol.
WELL DONE

[Blossom]

I like the words that you use in your works. it makes the poetry so different and really good.

[PaperHearts]

Interesting write! Your wide range of vocabulary is always a highlight for me when I read your work, and this piece in particular was a great representation of your use of that. The imagery that you created was beautiful, and full of emotion and depth, and I liked the clever twists that you seemed to throw in as the poem progressed. I loved the line "To be given a fancy case/by a man with no face". Abstract and captivating. Nice work,
~PaperHearts

[Jeff]

Very nice write.

[DeathByChoice]

Very beautiful. Nicely chosen words, sad story, and oozing with emotion. Great job!

[mamabear]

This is really beautiful, congratulations.

mamabear x

[Kelsie Eileen Stark]

Cute, and I'd say it could be a little song...:]