Dalaum [Darkness]

 

 

 

Dalaum

 

 

 

I try to make this darkness my home...

 

It lies in my sight.

Unmoving Unchanging

Sheer and opaque all at once

 

I'm neither lost nor blinded.

I'm no victim to this angle.

I've made a pact with it.

 

So, sit back in a higher chair.

Cross your legs and adjust your glasses.

Pretend that you've wandered

in every ally of my consciousness.

 

As I sterilize my soul

Of joy, hopes, and all

 

Grab a tight hold

Of my freezing cold

Frail, sliced hand

And face me with both choices

It's either Heaven

Or Juhanna

 

As I render excuses

To angels above

And serepents below

While the human within me

Screams to withdraw

 

Lock your gaze with mine

Even if I advert away

Cup my cheeks in your palms

 

As I sigh in pleasure

Indulging in this lost season

No efforts, no pious commitments.

No aches or indecisions.

 

Slap me across the unfeeling face

And shake my limp shoulders

Tell me about your "good intentions"

 

Ask me why and how...

As I watch the beautiful shadows

Crawl down unannounced

 

Smolder your patience left overs,

Trying to revive the dead phoenix

In the olive-green of my eyes

 

As the dusk envelopes me

Shielding me from the likes of you

And from the obligatory sunrise

 

I pull out my hand from yours.

I enfold and ask to be embraced.

 

You watch me decrease,

Coast further from your reach

 

The nothingness inside me unwinds

Feeling the slight ecstasy

Under that numb skin...

 

You frown and shake your head

You admit you've fought

To bring me back from the dead

 

I curl and draw back

As the shadows stroke

My splintered mentality

Devouring what's left of that human

With every stroke

Silently, in courtesy...

And the streams of light cycling in me shrivel.

 

"You do not understand, child of Adam. You never will."

My sighs reach your ears.

"I need the dusk. It knows how to nurse the ill."

 

With every dewdrop of hope emptied

With every darker shade painted

On these beautiful faithful walls

I feel whole. Complete.

 

Author's Note

Comments and reviews are appreciated.

*Note: Akuma: is the japanese name for demons.

Reviews

[My Fair Lady]

I am totally falling in love with you! Astounded by your perspective especially considering your young years, I appreciate you more and more my love. You should be exceptionally proud of this piece.. It is phenominal.
There are several stanzas that struck me.. but the most was this...

Lock your gaze with mine
Even if I advert away
Cup my cheeks in your palms

This is the action we take when we want to be heard... really listened to. You had my attention here, really listening the whole time, so when you asked for it.. I listened even harder. Bravo!

[Prateeksha Khot]

truely fantastic! awesome job

Fantastic and Brilliant work!! Your winding words lead the reader on a path thats started with darkness was rushing to light but ended in darkness.

[PaperHearts]

Wow! This was an incredible write. I thought that it was dark, twisted, and captivating, and told a really unique story in a beautifully poetic way. At first, I thought that the length of the poem was going to put me off somewhat, but I was so drawn into the story that I didn't even need to consider that. Your wording was so evocative, and was a real highlight of the piece. Amazing write,
~PaperHearts

[Blossom]

this is beautiful. its dark and somewhat Japanese theme. loved it.

[Marie Harrison]

Very dark write. Icy to read. Enjoyed.

[Jeff]

It's dark and extremely well written.

[YouoweYoupay]

Okay, so, the very first line I originally heard in a song. Some if not many have found this piece rather dark. In my writes, especially poems, I try to use new, less used vocabulary. I think it refreshens the poem and makes it more intersting to read. And frankly, I feel slightly annoyed for having used the word: "beautiful" twice here. Anyway, personlly, I liked those parts the most. I think they were kina dramatic lol:

As I sigh in pleasure
Indulging in this lost season
No efforts, no pious commitments.
No aches or indecisions.


Slap me across the unfeeling face
And shake my limp shoulders
Tell me about your "good intentions"

And yea, I've put "good intentions" between quotations. People shoul just min their own f*****g buiness. In mot cases, You should offer help after some1 asks for it. Not the opposite. The parts that I liked the least were:

Ask me why and how...
As I watch the beautiful shadows
Crawl down unannounced

I think they were unnesessary.

What do you guys think?

-Thanks for reading.

[Wondering Mind]

dark, indeed...
That's why I always carry an inner flash light..just in case it goes dark there