Provisional. Precious.

 

 

Provisional. Precious.

 

 

You tilt your head waiting for an answer

 

I press my lips together

 

Consuming the laughter

 

 

You look funny when you focus too hard

 

But you're ruining the melody

 

Playing in our midnight backyard

 

 

You're cracking my quiet

 

I shelter your hand with mine

 

As I stare into the sight

 

Of everlasting myriads of stars...

 

 

Your ashen eyes glisten with a blush

 

My fingers ascend to your lips

 

No words needed, love. Hush...

 

 

Can we breathe instead of think...?

 

Can we stay this way...?

 

Drown in a gaze instead of blink...?

 

 

You stare, sitting by me still

 

My fingers on your lips

 

You've worked on that skill

 

 

You can read my lines

 

And my smile thanks you...

 

You cross your fingers through mine...

 

 

It's only minutes until...

 

You vanish back into your world...

 

You respect my wish and I will...

 

Miss the silent magic we hold...

 

 

A Shooting star…should I make a wish, dear..?

 

Even though I know you drew that star near…?

Reviews

[Omar Fendri]

oh God oh God ^^ this one is amazing in all the scales.
the rhythm is extraordinary
The imagination is splendid
the words are heartfelt
The questions make the song more beautiful and sweet to read
the close is breathtaking.
in three letters, it's W-O-W :)

[Nadi]

Interesting idea, love some of the vocab.

[Closedown]

Aww, it's so sweet! Much enjoyed, thanks for writing!

[Coyote Poetry]

A interesting poem. To be content in the moment. I had to read the poem a few time to grasp the story. I like the complete poem. The ending made the poem complete. A excellent poem.
Coyote

[alan peter kelly]

the sweet abstractions roll cohesively and as i go i find myself smiling...to myself at how so many poets can come up with new variations on similar themes...this poem is a blossom...fragrant with life and an open mind...you have lightened my day and for that...i am grateful...

[Tomi]

ohh! am in love

[nono]

I like it cute, and light hearted keep up this kind of work...without it to brighten a person up who knows how depressed the world will really come. Nice job!

[Frantzuu]

This is really beautiful. It has a great flow, and it's just freaking amazing. I can feel the emotions in the piece as I read it. If you really want to know how great a poem is read it out loud. This piece is beautiful!!!!!!!!!!!!!