Iblease' Condolences

That night, Iblease came to me...

 

 

 

Your tongue would move

tear the bits of me.

 

And that day came when

Your words tore through

The freshly stitched

Piece of ignorance.

 

They cut into the wounds

Still throbbing. Still raw

And in a mirror I saw

My shrieking reflection.

 

I looked horrible.

I was departing

Just a half of me though

Not the whole of me.

 

I could still breathe.
Couldn't I?
Walk and talk with ease
In those mourning rags.

 

And that night he appeared.
His features oddly smeared
His figure proved hunger
to seal new trades
with those enslaved by anger.

 

Iblease came to me.

 

Souls pray for shield
Upon hearing the name
And he would ache. burn. Surrender.

 

I prayed not
Staring up from my corner
at the shadow
above which he floated.

 

It was understood
I wanted no fight.

 

Iblease slithered
A few distance left
Between us and
In his palm
Unfolded my hand

 

In it he dropped a seed
"My deepest condolences."
and he was gone
but his voice went on.

 

Iblease gave me a seed.
"Plant it wherever you please.
Then let it grow.
Let it be..."

 

I caught a glimpse
Of a young soul
So eager to fly
And easy to fall.

 

I gave it false hopes
Something cheap to feed
Then I used that soul
Merged it with his seed
And all that sweat
I gathered
to keep the soil wet.

 

Iblease gave me a seed.
A gift, he claimed
Not out of greed.
I placed it where I pleased

And in two years or three
There it was...

A tree.

 

All wrinkled, with shaken roots
Branches coated in thorns.
Its trunk bent, with no pride
No leaves. No fruit.
silent. Betrayed. Half dead
Chocking on soot.

 

Iblease came to me.

He gave me a seed.
The condolences
He thought I'd need.
   ... ... ...

 

Author's Note

Comments and reviews are appreciated.
*NOTE: Iblease is one of the many names for the Devil, mostly known in the three major Abrahamic Beliefs: (Christianity, Islam, Judism).

Reviews

[Havatara]

It was interesting. I wasn't entirely sure what you were trying to say with it, but it was good in that I understood what each individual stanza meant, just not the overall meaning of it. Good job, though.

[Dante Balsote]

Chilling.

[Blossom]

that was haunting!!!! I follow Islam so it was a chilling poem for me. Very well executed. One of my favorites. the ending was amazing like always. You really know how to end a piece of work. and leave a great impression.

[Moonflower]

This was hauntingly exquisite, one of my favorite pieces from WC so far, the story played out flawlessly, I love the repetitive lines that were altered just a touch, it seemed to add so much more to it, the ending, the sprouting of a wretched, gnarled tree. Amazing imagery and word flow. This was just darkly divine~

[PaperHearts]

What a powerful piece! This poem really packed a punch, and moved me in a way that I didn't think it would. I really liked your wording in this poem, and thought that it was a particular highlight of the piece. You managed to balance a real sense of subtlety with an emotional strength, which resulted in the perfect combination. A thought-provoking concept and well-executed poem. Great write,
~PaperHearts

[Wondering Mind]

Quite a haunting read. Your use of "Iblease" to a reader who knows the name in Arabic must have added to the effect of the write. It did to me..Very different read, I must say.

[No use.]

painful tales of deception slithering into my giving womb, offering misery a seed full of nothing but Iblease.

[Brown Bull]

WOW, I realy loved this piece, but I read your note first so I knew who Iblease was. Unlike Missvixen, I love religious work, especially non traditional stuff.

[MissVixen]

I had to read it twice cause I didn't get the note on who Iblease was until the end haha. This piece is very different and I can honestly say I haven't read anything like it before.

Im not really in to religious pieces but this one held my attention :D My favorite part was the mirror and the "shrieking reflection" appeared.

[Shellie]

OK 1st of all i need to know who Iblease is before i understand the reason he is there, and i do like the idea. Its very different and the rhyme is good also.