Remember, I solace myself, Once transformation catches fire And I become an eagle Slicing the mountain mist With my pride Language ceases Human forms rendered Laughable, really Ants scuttling in tiny streams Mazes that go nowhere But let them believe that they Comprehend their own wandering
So, tell me and be honest, Who must I fear?
Sooner than later With a heavy heart I descend Seated on a pink mat Lotus position, The pain in my side beckoning My bladder infection Seemed to be improving Or so I thought Thank god for delusional home remedies Of Lemon and herbal water Moreover, it's my turn today To hang the laundry And prepare supper
Embarrassing, isn't it? A majestic eagle no more Reduced to this Yes, I understand, that the clouds and wind Still bow at my command grudgingly parting away With mere thought To reveal a crown of golden light Honorable and beloved by all
But I confess to the sun That her brilliance stirs my jealousies Just a tiny bit. Not more. She begs to differ, nonetheless Swears to me that I am indeed A star as bright as she But I haven't asked for her opinion And despite my deep respect for her We often argue about this.
This has the tone of a simpler time somehow.
Your voice is simple and conversational.
Relatable that we, especially us older folks, feel grounded by our illnesses, aches, and pains. How we wish to fly again.
The Eagle such noble creature That Father Sky allowed it to fly and Mother Earth gave it where to reign, and even then The Eagle held high standing in character and pride can not hold back a tear it may fly no more. Thank you for sharing
Enjoyed reading this, and love the visuals it conjures up thinking about the eagle and the sun. And that even the mighty eagle has its own challenges and moments of struggle and (slight) jealousy...
Great write...
So relatable, I have been dealing with a UTI for the past couple of weeks, with all the discomfort that entails while carrying on regardless with the everyday chores. How I envy that eagle flying close to the sun looking down on us ants. NormalI I would conjure up wings to fly, but the energy just isn:t there. Wonderful write. Imagery laden.
Wow this is a super cool bright imaginative ambitious poem competing with stars with cool eloquent muse. Kudos for this stellar shine poem.
Plz pleez do read my newest poem too , it has enough reviews so comment only if you really wish to.
There is no doubt in my mind this is good... in fact, it is painfully good, if you know what I mean... I hope you do ... and anyway, who is not jealous of the sun .. you little star you :)
Simply sublime. Its interesting that we humans can at once be eagles flying high above it all and little mammals stuck on the ground, slaves to gravity. What a lovely dichotomy human beings are. Thanks for sharing this. Also, that art is pretty kickass.
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4 Years Ago
I KNOW. The art is beautiful. I couldn't find a more fitting illustration for how I feel and what re.. read moreI KNOW. The art is beautiful. I couldn't find a more fitting illustration for how I feel and what represents this work. By the way, if I recall correctly, the artist was just a boy when he drew this. If that's the case, talent shows in his early years! Thank you for your kind review. I'm glad you enjoyed Eagle and Sun.
Yes, life can be mundane and the tasks like laundry seems so silly compared to flying high like an eagle. We all go through different phases in life. We can soar like eagles one day and be as tiny as ants the next. Life....it is what it is and we have to adapt. Good write. Lydi**
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4 Years Ago
Thank you, Lydia. One day in a shape and the other day in another. Have a good one.
From soaring eagle staring down at the maze of human ants to suffering from a UTI on a yoga mat, it's a brilliant juxtaposition. I love this piece. The final line could be a poem on its own, and a good one at that. Am I an eagle an ant a human or a star? The poem allows the reader to be all simultaneously.
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4 Years Ago
Yes, I read the final line and its comprehensive and interesting even on its own! Thank you for show.. read moreYes, I read the final line and its comprehensive and interesting even on its own! Thank you for showing me the bright side of writing. Aka the final product. First drafts make us want to give up. :)
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