Scorpion

I never killed that ancient warrior,

Who's seldom mourned by planets,

And I never asked you to fear me,

All I ask for is a little bit of privacy,

And a bit of earth that lacks,

Your 'beneficial' intervention.

I've been quite saddened

By the unfitting reputation

You've weaved and printed

In terrifying engineering

And designs of ink beneath your skin.

You, my dear friend, reek of death

As strongly as I do,

And you petrify limbs, pollute blood veins,

And spoil hearts with venom

More artfully than I do.

So, let me wait beneath sand and wooden logs

And moonless heavens,

And let my prey be my prey,

You'd be fortunate if I don't catch the sight of you.

Reviews

[StarNinja]

Oh I get it. It's a riddle right? Let me see....... Venom is important so its a poisonous animal. The sand and logs line suggests that it's small. People like to get tattoos of it apparently. I think I will guess.... A Unicorn! That has to be it, it's the only thing that makes sense.
Congratulations on another splendid poetic work. I happen to be a Scorpio myself, so I thoroughly enjoyed reading it naturally. Keep up the good work and when will we get another Dreams chapter?

[YouoweYoupay]

StarNinja, thank you for stopping by. One of my good friends is also a Scorpio. Unlike the first ominous impression people have of Scorpions, there's alot more uncovered beneath this splendid creature's stealthy, shady moves and universally feared sting. I've read more than once and was interested in the general personality analysis of people born under this star. Glad you enjoyed this little piece. My mind has been occupied with midterm exams and my light-blub of prose-inspiration has been dying on me lately. F**k that. But I will eventually, hopefully soon, get back to working on the next chapter. I hope you've been well. ^_^

-Rain.

[barleygirl]

I was bit on the leg by a scorpion once . . . it was many times more intense than a bee sting, but still, it wasn't as horrific as I expected. The intense burning faded after an hour & then I forgot all about it. I couldn't have known your poem was about scorpions, had I not read your back-and-forth with StarNinja, which I found very enlightening. I don't remember ever knowing a Scorpio, but it was interesting to read about them. Even tho I could not get this poem at all, I love the idea of doing a riddle & I felt you offered big bold hints for those in the know (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Sourav]

What I like in this poem is the use of the words. Lines are very nicely constructed and the poem has a nice intensity. Well written, quite nice.

[Layla J Omorose]

I really like the last line of this poem. I think it closes the poem very well. There is a stanza when the Scorpion is talking about reeking of death and something being more venomous than it. I wonder if it is a human who they see as a threat or another predator like a snake that is waiting to eat them...another well done poem.

[Coyote Poetry]

I was station in Africa, Asia and South America. A Scorpion is a fearless spider.
"You, my dear friend, reek of death
As strongly as I do,
And you petrify limbs, pollute blood veins,
And spoil hearts with venom
More artfully than I do."
The above were my favorite. Best to keep your distance from predators. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote