Unrequited Love

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Unrequited Love

 

 

You fancy living by the sea

Or so I've often heard

Riding horses, sunset glee

All of which sound quite absurd..

 

Endless green reflects the skies

Amazes your eyes

And sings your spirit back to life?

Or so foretold your uncle's wife.

 

The sea is not a Cello tune

Not big-hearted nor forgiving

Not more quenching than desert dunes

Not a reverie for forgetting

Tongue-slips, faces, and fractured moons

 

The sea turns grey and dreary

Swallows ships and pirate dens

Reassuringly and on the contrary

Waters swarm with vile fins

Of vile beasts and mourning whales

That die ashore of mortal sins

 

Summer days are of no name

Salt and bitterness and complaints

Of women with hair stubbornly tamed

 

Nights are lit by fidgeting stars

That find no solace in guiding the lost

Your breath would stick in humid bars

And rents with hurtful, rising costs

Only to be able to hear a far

But unchanging, callous howl

 

If you could manage

To fit your thumb in a keyhole

Or give white the name black

Then be my guest

And join the line

Of waiting for the sea to love you back.

 

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

I enjoyed the complete poem. The ending made the poem complete.
"If you could manage
To fit your thumb in a keyhole
Or give white the name black
Then be my guest
And join the line
Of waiting for the sea to love you back."
No weakness in the outstanding poem.
Coyote

[A.E. Surdam]

Beautiful imagery. Great write!

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

apparently the sea loves no one and yet so many of us love her with all that we are.........excellent piece.

[Bowers]

wow. I loved it. the end was definitely my favorite. the whole poem read out so well, I enjoyed reading it. :) I like the part " And join the line; Of waiting for the sea to love you back" that is a beautiful line, and so true when you connect it to reality and how many individuals feel today. great job!

[Nick Erickson]

I do "fancy living by the sea" - in fact I make my living on it, and have for the last 23 years.

Your poem struck a chord of reality, you writing as if you know, as one of us - a sailor.
"The sea is not a Cello tune
Not big-hearted or forgiving"

The play with words in "not more quenching than desert dunes" is excellent and true. You get no more from drinking a cup of sea water for survival than you would a cup of sand.

The image of "fidgiting stars" is good. I'll look at them a little differently now.

I for one, will not be in that line of those "waiting for the sea to love (them) back."

Well written.

[YouoweYoupay]

Eric, what an insightful review. Thank you for sharing your thoughts on 'unrequited love' I was glad of your visit. Please do come again.

-Rain.

[Scott Mou]

Interesting Poem.... dem rhymes

[TL Boehm]

Wonderful write. The sea is a capricious mistress.

[Rafif]

Amazing! You never fail to amaze me. Darkness should always be linked to beauty.

[YouoweYoupay]

Right you are! Thanks for reviewing, love.

[Barbara Walker]

Nice!

[YouoweYoupay]

Thanks!

[khalid]

very nicely penned..

[YouoweYoupay]

Yeah?? Let's show the grumpy, unattractive side of the sea for once. Thanks for reading!