Hardly Dying

Just needed to get this out of me.

I'm scared we've reached the point in our story where neither of us is good for each other anymore. We just hold on because it is habit, an old habit, and everyone knows the saying about those. I don't want this to be true, but I'm terrified that it is.

I love you and have loved you for a long time now. It's a deep, all consuming kind. You were my first and, up to this moment, my only. I was young when it started, too young to know how fast these things end. I'd like to say that, if I had known, I never would have allowed myself to fall quite so hard for you, but I don't think it really would have mattered in the end.

I am a very logical person in my everyday life. I'm cautious, aware of my surroundings, and myself, but none of that seemed to matter where you are concerned and it still doesn't. Logic and love have very little, if not nothing, to do with each other.

I call myself your friend these days, but that is not what I am, it's not how I feel. I'm the one left in love, completely alone and abandoned by the one who is supposed to be there with me.

Reviews

[tremainiator]

A lovely little ode to 'first love,' Wejustare. Highly relatable: we've all been there.

"everyone knows the saying about those. I don't want this to be true, but I'm terrified that it is": WOULD LIKE MORE ABOUT 'THE SAYING' AND SOME GENERALIZATIONS ABOUT THE NATURE OF HABIT, A FEW WORDS - HABIT IS SUCH AN INTERESTING BUSINESS, SO UNIVERSALLY ENSLAVING.

Second paragraph could hardly be bettered. The only thing you might add is something about the natural fear of moving on to 'the next love' (HABIT, AGAIN?).

Next paragraph: You use 'very' twice. On a personal note, I always advise against using it except in dialogue and in forms like 'the very reason' or 'the very one' etc. It is always better to substitute another adjective or consider using none at all. What's wrong with "I am a logical person" and "Logic and love have little to do with each other"?

Last paragraph: First sentence is fine. Second sentence could be rewritten and amplified, Another sentence might be added.

I greatly enjoyed this little work and could easily see it expanded upon and inserted into a larger bit of work. I am going to look at some of your other work.

All the best. Tremainiator.

[Wejustare]

Thanks so much for your review. I will try my best to get some more of my work on the site. Hopefully, you will let me know your opinion of those as well. :)