Wakes of Winds

He appeared, gently brushing the petals of a serene, coloured life

The flower shuddered, sighed, joyful, opening to the light of his heart

Eyes met, minds met, life met; an old dance divine

Face to face, fellow to flower, souls mirrored in eyes, intertwined and inseparable

"Not right"s and "so wrong"s filled their ears, two sides shouting somber words that burned like acid

Neutralized by their basic connection, strong in spite of separation, deep in spite of distance

Mountains overcome, oceans swam; binded hands; their stand illustrated in truths honesty

Unity achieved, fears shattered, molds broken, purity between and nothing less, sublime bliss

 

Forever forward, moving, flowing, showing courtship, with all colours glowing

Soldiering on, striding through hardship, happy always, whole, fulfilled

Lives filled to the brim with happiness, companions in a state of ineffable peace

Infinitely eternal and still their blooming love flourishes in the wakes of winds calling

Reviews

[Dream Weaver]

A wonderful write, every line bleeds beautifully into the next.
But I would have broken it up into uniformed stanza's but that's
just me. I understand how you were looking for the pause effect
to make it that much more enticing for the reader..Overall an
excellent piece....

[x]

An interesting write. For a write that is written by two, I can understand how the construction came about as one lover feeds off another and the feelings felt between the two, are added to the write in a flowing of expression but the result is a somewhat juxtaposed form which never-the-less, totally suits the idea of what is being expressed here. So, for what it is and what it is about....well done.

[Storyteller of Dimensio..]

I agree with Cloud6 (and could say the same, except it's 01:58 in the morning :D).

Also what I liked are the repetitions which I too like to use (makes it all sound better). Then the mood, imagery, ... well it was a pleasure to read, especially since you choose the words so well.
The final message of hope and how love will overcome everything is so common, yet somehow it never gets old :D Maybe it's due to the harshness of the world and other so many sad things happening to us daily...

[Eric Cox]

I think this is a very positive and beautiful poem.

[Legion]

Lovely. Reminds me of Romeo and Juliet but with a much better ending. Well written. Kudos.

[Kathryn Star, Shine!]

'Souls mirrored in eyes' haunting words and delicately put. A nice image of the daily struggle in finding lasting love.

[Divine Pain]

very nice write...I can tell you let your pen flow as you write...good job!

[Brittany]

Very beautiful. It gives me hope and makes me happy for strangers in love. Well done collaboration. Great flow to it and wonderful metaphors. Bravo, bravo.

" Eyes met, minds met, life met; an old dance divine"

I love this line. Kind of like old souls re-uniting in a new life.