Kuren, my brother, and I have gone through hell and back together. We used to despise each other, but then we realized all we needed was each other to get our lives on track. He's the best, always.
To me, flow matters little but it is the emotion that comes across that is what makes good poetry. And this does. I love you true and relatable this is. Great job and thank you for sharing!
Good stuff. Very personal.
One of the lines felt awkward to me. ("Regretted and missed") But it may have a deeper meaning that I didn't pick up on. The rest of the piece spoke clearly to me though
Posted 10 Years Ago
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10 Years Ago
In the first section of this poem I tried to relate the conflicted feelings I had towards him for a .. read moreIn the first section of this poem I tried to relate the conflicted feelings I had towards him for a while. I Regretted him being my brother, but I also missed him when we separated and went different paths.
I hope that makes it seem clearer =]
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