Within This Hell

Pondering deep inside myself - yes I am here somewhere, I think

Within This Hell

 

 

I've been trapped inside sanity's shell -

reality's cold, technical plot.

Crawling around inside a prison of dull white living skull

and mindless thought.

 

Cloaked inside the darkness, barely felt,

A beam of calm and rational light

drifts lost and out of sight-

somewhere deep within this hell of flesh and bone and thought.

I thought...

 

Or think I did.

Reviews

[GTVile]

Mmmm, yes. I like the outward projection of your thoughts and feelings in a metaphor of actual, physical experience. That's a hard concept for most to wrap their heads around, let alone portray it in a fashion that can be processed by the readers that most likely haven't a clue what the experience is like.

[Hollow Man]

this is haunting yet lovely. i dig the structure and rhyme scheme as well. 'i thought...or think i did' says so much in so little

KGS