Three words and a glass of wine

Three words and a glass of wine

A Poem by Warren Daniel II
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A young girl oblivious to the world around her learns to forgive the four letters that hurt her

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An empty breeze fills her heart

Mercy and depression engraved on her face

Is love intangible as the Gods we know?

Her soul replaced by an unmarked tomb

Why is love associated with the heart and never the mind?

Is the ever pumping blood vessel as important as we make it?

Deeply hurt by time

Betrayed by four letters

Her damaged lips as fractured as the land she stands on

A blade of light pierces through her Earth work, illuminating hope

Her sculptured pain slowly degrades

An immortal life re-emerged, a soul without pain

© 2015 Warren Daniel II


Author's Note

Warren Daniel II
I would like to apologize in advance for any grammatical errors, honest thoughts are highly appriciated

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when I first read this I was thinking the four letter was "hate" instead of "love" and I guess that is derived by my own negative feelings toward love especially since today is Valentine's Day"

Love this lines........

Her soul replaced by an unmarked tomb
Her sculptured pain slowly degrades


a nicely written poem that asks the right amount of questions while searching for the answers

Posted 9 Years Ago


3 of 3 people found this review constructive.

Jerome F Knox III pseudonym Nefarious J. Dorsey

9 Years Ago

For some reason I can't see your entire so based on the lines I can see here is my response.... The .. read more
Jerome F Knox III pseudonym Nefarious J. Dorsey

9 Years Ago

When it is believed, conceived and perceived......
Warren Daniel II

9 Years Ago

Hmmm... Makes sense, thanks again for the review



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Very well written. Enjoyable piece. :)

Posted 7 Years Ago


You have done a very good job here! This poem makes you think and wonder how this poor girl's life pans out after so much pain. Although very tragic, at last somehow this soul as at rest.

Regards,

Helena

Posted 9 Years Ago


"Her damaged lips as fractured as the land she stands on"
This line speaks loudly and beautiful.

Keep up the good write!

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Warren Daniel II

9 Years Ago

Thank you so much for your kind words, your honest thoughts are highly appreciated.
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You write very beautifully, dear poet. This is a deep reservoir. Indeed, "why is love associated with the heart and never the mind"?

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Warren Daniel II

9 Years Ago

Thank you so much for giving my work a read and supporting my art, your honest thoughts are apprecia.. read more
Aloha Warren,

This one is full of tender emotion and love.

Thank you for sharing your talent with us out here...

Alisa ;-)

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

"Why is love associated with the heart and never the mind?" -- this was an outstanding line to me as this thought has vexed me enough and is at the center of the piece(literally ;)) Good job (y)

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I found it very interesting!! every line forces to read ahead .... very well done!!

Posted 9 Years Ago


I liked this poem as it described the transition from a warm heart to a freezed heart.The thing i am striving to become. I saw the description to be cold. "unmarked tomb"- gives an idea of immense pain which the girl went through.I am not a great fan of love poems.But i do like poems on Judas kiss :p nicely written

~Sophy

Posted 9 Years Ago


You express a beautiful, yet painful message here. Very powerful words.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Warren Daniel II

9 Years Ago

Thank for taking the time to read my work, your honest thoughts are always appreciated
Wow I really enjoyed this. It was such a deep poem very descriptive and loved your choice of words especially with the last line.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Warren Daniel II

9 Years Ago

Hey, thanks for the review, I appreciate you taking time to read my work.

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Added on February 14, 2015
Last Updated on February 18, 2015
Tags: Love, girl, forgiveness, sadness, hurt, heart, soul, betrayed, pain

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Warren Daniel II
Warren Daniel II

Johannesburg, South Africa



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