Its to late

Its about when I realized that I was losing the one person i thought i loved

With my face streaked with tears...I slowly look up into your eyes...to find them looking at someone else...I try to reach out to you...but its to late...you are walking away...I try to call your name...but...the words...are stuck in my throat...my chest aches as I watch you go...my heart slowly breaking into two...I feel nothing but...searing...pain...it shoots through me...as I realize my one true love...is...gone...forever...

Author's Note

I'm not very good at spelling

Reviews

[Wyrn Tiger]

wow. your form is hard to read but over all its good

[Wannabewriter16]

Thank you I have more also. This was 2 yrs ago when i started. I belive my new ones are better now. Also i have a Facebook group called Bonnie's writings if youd like to look.

[Chirag Kumar]

Feelings are raw. A beautiful poem indeed. And if you work out on the structure of the poem, it will seem more presentable to the reader and will enhance its quality further. Thanks for sharing :)

[Chris]

Spelling is mostly attention to detail AND experience at writing... you'll get better. The emotional impact of this piece was well presented and readily understood. "Too" has meaning; part of writing and expressing your thoughts means making and understanding word choices. Many "flaws" are readily understood if you read your work aloud (for real now) AND do it slowly - ensuring you read the words AS THEY ARE WRITTEN and not as you wish they were.

Take care,
Chris

[Wannabewriter16]

Thank you so much for the review Chris it means a lot to me please feel free to leave reviews on my other work if you would like because I'm sure I have messed up on them as well

[Chris]

Bonnie, it isn't about our flaws - we ALL have them... its about our own willingness to grow our selves into more than we were.

[Wannabewriter16]

I have a major willingness to grow myself into more than what I was.

[Wannabewriter16]

thanks for reading!!!

[Insight "MH"]

Very emotional piece, it was a nice read for me, thank you for sharing.

Insight.

[Wannabewriter16]

Thank you very much,it means a lot .

[rosieposie]

I can really feel the emotion behind this.

[Wannabewriter16]

I'm glad you can feel the emotion behind this,it means a lot.

[Audrey Murray]

you are very good at expressing your feelings I like the way you have put spaces between some of the words like the way we do when we are crying well done

[Wannabewriter16]

Thank you so much. It may be very little words,but they truly show how I felt at the time. I was actually crying when I wrote it. Thanks for reading.