Ricochet

A story of prostitution

I prepare myself, all alone

the light of the room improves the tone

I smooth out my dress

wishing I was home

"We are creatures unliked,"

I say to my self,

"Unloved, unsafe,"

From the mirror I turn away

But the voice in my head will

follow me to my grave

to live a normal life,

not as a sex slave

 

I abandon the room and enter the hell

how classy they are, my broad clientele

and he looks at me, and I look at him

And I think to myself,

let the fun begin.

 

I take him in my hands

because I've done this before

but a young lady will never kiss and tell

so on this part of my life

 

I refuse to dwell.

Author's Note

A rare and feared topic, but I'm never afraid to tackle any topic.

Reviews

[Skye]

I love how you separated the last line from the rest. Most would be too embarrassed approach this subject, but you did it tastefully, and very beautifully.

[A. V. Madison]

No subject too mature, no poem executed badly- that's my motto.

[Skye]

And what an awesome motto it is. Sometimes my dad questions me on how I can write, since he says I haven't really lived to have experience. I just shake my head.

[A. V. Madison]

Amen to head-shaking! I mean, I'm eleven. I can write about prostitution all day. Not that I know anybody who's a prostitute, and I'm not one myself, but I just can imagine it. My dad says the same thing. But they don't know us xD *high-five*

[Skye]

Definitely! My relatives see me writing about lovers leaving, people's entire families dying in car crashes, and they like how can you even relate? On a whole, i'm rather sheltered, but its just so easy to imagine how it would feel, and to get swept away in the emotion of it. I could probably write about anything you through at me, whether I've lived it or not.

[A. V. Madison]

It's the same thing for me! My dad's all like, "Why the hell are you writing about hookers? Is there something you'd like to tell me?" Haha.

[Skye]

Lol, well, girls are their daddy's babies. I suggest you smile and walk away slowly. :)

[♪The Girl Next Do..]

Nicely done, my dear! Indeed, a feared and uncommon topic, but you did a fantastic job writing about the it. Wonderful work!

[Shauna Jacqueline Ander..]

The juttery start is well justified through the clear distress of the character. I like when you introduce a flow, when she seems to start taking back control, or maybe just barely gaining control [through the clients]...
Talented little kitten =]
Keep them coming. x

[A. V. Madison]

Oh so I'm a kitten now, hmm?
And thank you, I'm glad you understood that. The craziness in the first stanza to show the nervousness the prostitute is feeling. It seems like you read my poems better than anyone else, and understand them better than anyone else.

[Shauna Jacqueline Anderson]

Haha, I noticed the 'Nyan cat' thing properly for the first time xD sorry. lol.
I seem to find it easy to relate to a lot of what you write about. No idea why, but I'm glad I do =]

[A. V. Madison]

I'm glad you do too. I just hope that you don't relate to this poem O.o

[Shauna Jacqueline Anderson]

lmfao! I was going to put in brackets I've never done prostitution xD It's more the control/lack of that I can relate to in this.. The last verse if probably accurate though. =/ x

[A. V. Madison]

Thank goodness, Sian!! Don't screw with me like that xD

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

It is sad to think some feel they need to resort to this... a very gripping poem. Nice work.

[A. V. Madison]

Wow, thank you so much! I can't believe that you, The Rock And Roll Cowboy, is actually reviewing my work! Thank you so much.

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Why can't you believe that? i am just a fellow writer. You have a lot of talent.

[A. V. Madison]

Thank you so much. And It's just that you are so famous on this site, and I'm so... not famous xD

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

I am not famous, just been here a while... we are all on the same level, artists expressing ourselves. It will be a pleasure to read more of your work.

[A. V. Madison]

Thank you so much :) it means a lot.

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

You are welcome... I hope to get some of your opinions on my work too :)

[Marie]

The second verse is your poem.Drop the last verse; the poem doesn't need it. Rework the first verse until it rhymes and scans as well as the second. THen you'll have something.

[A. V. Madison]

Jesus Marie- someone's in a mood.

[Marie]

Your second verse really is good. I thought you wanted a critical review, not just something to make you feel good. But okay.

[A. V. Madison]

Oh no, don't worry dear. I was just kidding. I'm glad you made a critical review- those are the ones that are most greatly appreciated- and they help me feel better. I'm very sorry if it sounded differently in your mind. That's the problem with the internet- you never know what people really mean. I'm very sorry if it sounded rude, I was just trying to make a joke. Please forgive me Marie, I'm always glad that you review my work. I'm extremely sorry that it sounded differently.

[Marie]

Yes, things do seem different over the internet, and that's why we need to be careful. You seem to have some talent, so I will keep reviewing your work. But it won'd te just praise.

[A. V. Madison]

Okay- and that's fine- but I'm really sorry for the misunderstanding.