Changing

My first attempt at a rap song. Hope you enjoy.

Author's Note

(first verse, rap)

Born a stone baby with a wish to breathe
Though I had earned nothing, God gave me some thinga
a sister, a friend, and a serious choice
Would I subside like the others or find a voice?

It rained every night when I was a little girl
I saw the pain behind every curl
And words can hurt ya
No matter what your parents told ya
I've learned enough in my eleven years
Though it ain't much, I am still here.

(chorus, singing:)
C'mon scream it louder, louder, louder
Nothing makes me prouder, prouder, prouder
That to see someone like me
Being every thing they can be
And times may be changing up on us
But we still have unquaking trust
And times may be changing up on us
But we still have unquaking trust

(verse 2, rap:)

Imagine a lonely little girl that walks home alone
She's standing outside, all chances of life have been blown
And her knees hurt, her feet hurt, but her heart hurts more
She's living a bad life with a hateful core

(chorus)

(verse 3, singing)

Don't let me fade away....
There's still a price to pay...
Don't let me fade away
There's still a price to pay.....

(chorus)

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

You are a amazing twelve year old writer. You write with great skill. I like the poem. Good music is poetry with music. I will come back and read some of your stories. Keep doing what you are doing. You are very talented.
Coyote

[A. V. Madison]

Thank you so much, Coyote! :)

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Very nicely done... I think you have a future in the music business.

[Caradoc]

This is quite good actually. I'm not normally a fan of rap but I can't help but like these lyrics. Now all it needs is a good beat and someone with a real voice to sing it. I swear if I hear another autotuned idjit or some fool that does nothing but talk and call it singing...

Ahem. Anyway, I enjoyed reading this. It has an interesting message and a good, fitting title. I especially like the final verse. Although, it could use one more...

Nice job.

P.S. In the chorus you say "That to see someone like me". Is it truly meant to be "that"? Or did you mean "than"?

-Caradoc

[A. V. Madison]

Thank you so much, Caradoc. And yes, I meant 'than'. As in nothing makes me prouder than to see someone like me being everything they can be. I'm sure if you say it aloud to yourself it might make more sense, haha. But thank you :)