Curious

Don't judge people by first impressions, they may be more like you than you think...

Curious

 

I patiently spelt out my surname for the third time to the uncertain receptionist. 

 

“What time d’ya want?” she said, twiddling her pen in a most annoying manner.

 

“4.30 ok?” I suggested. “My partner has to come from work.”

 

“Oh, the appointment’s for both of you?” she signed. “I’d better put his name down too then.”

 

I’d told her at the beginning that I wanted an appointment for myself and my partner but it had obviously gone over her bleached blonde head.

 

“What’s his name?” she grumbled. 

 

“Her name,” I said calmly.  “Vanessa Hamilton.”

 

The girl’s jaw dropped but nevertheless she wrote the name down. 

 

“Are you partners?” she squeaked suddenly, looking at up me with surprising intensity for one apparently so thick.

 

Unsure as to whether she might turn out to be a fanatical homophobe, I merely nodded.

 

A shy grin spread across her face and she blushed as she handed me the appointment card.

 

I gave her a friendly smile in return as I left. She stood fixed to the spot behind the desk, watching me as I went. In her mind were a thousand thoughts, all of which she was too afraid to think.  

Reviews

[Hannah Paige]

This was an interesting segment of a story that is probably much larger. Though well written and an easy read, it felt some what incomplete and stunted, leaving me with a sense of dissatisfaction. However, this just makes me crave a fuller view of this story, which probably says something good about what you've written here.

[Tina Kline]

It seems as if the receptionist was curious at the end in more of a positive way than negative one. I don't know if I'm right but I think this would make a really good longer story. I really enjoyed this.

[Magic;)]

All too much of the world is afraid to think, its nice to see someone noticing the fear in people rather than the ignorance :)

[EnternalNight]

I know this feeling, and I hate it when people give you the "your joking right..." look! anyway Love the story and details!!

[RienKelsoCinema]

How very scary, I wouldn't know personally but by hearing the thoughts of such a detailed young woman of being curious, it just might be gut-wrenching. Nicely worded. Brilliant!

[buoyantMaureen]

This is a cute snippet, and I would have read on for longer! It sounds almost nonfiction-y. Don't be afraid to go for more detail! All the details you added were great but I could have used more.