My Worries Wash Away

My fears are ever growing, 

I think I've lost my mind. 

Its dark and cold 

And I can't find my way. 

The rain is falling

Thick and blinding

Calling my doubts forth

Nothing seems like it'll be alright

The future's bleak

In my own mind's eye

"God, please help me!" I cry out, 

The rain, amazingly, lightens up

I can see all that's before me

It's alive and it's open

Even while the drops still fall

Suddenly it doesn't seem so grim

The pitter patter, gently calming

The water's cool against my skin, 

And still I can't remember

Which way I ought to go

But I let my worries melt away

and spin a few times

Letting the rain kiss my cheeks

As if they were tears

Of happiness

Author's Note

Just a poem for a contest, still reviews really make my day. :)

Reviews

[Lina Grey]

This is lovely :) i love the metaphors and the transition from dark to light. Great job hun.

[SheActsLikeSummer]

I normally hate giving short reviews, but I don't really know what to say other than how brilliantly written and beautiful this was. Well done.

[Forever Hidden]

This, my friends, is how WE need to write!

[DalainaRenee]

Very well written. And this is something everyone wants. We want our worries to go away! Well described!!

[Skye]

Thank you :)

[DalainaRenee]

Your welcome!

[Kerri Hart]

very beautiful. I loved all the metaphors epecially "I let the rain Kiss my cheeks"
Very sweet and thoughtful line.
Well done, and keep up the good work, I reallly enjoy reading what you write! ;) :D :) ;D

[Skye]

Lol, thanks :)

[Kerri Hart]

no prblem!

[Willowtree]

This is such a cute poem! I like the little metaphors you threw in like "letting the rain kiss my cheeks". One thing; I think you could've made the poem a bit longer. The change from the dark scene you set to the new brighter scene was a bit sudden. But that's about it!:) Great job! How'd you do on the contest?

[Skye]

The poem won, Inspiring. Thank so much for reviewing, Second, I'll see if I can find a way to make a smoother transition. :)

[Willowtree]

Woah! Awesome job:))

[Cristina Moldoveanu]

Beautiful, I can relate to this. I confess to you that when I was in my younger days I used to love rain very much, it made me feel so fresh and new. Now the opposite is true, I feel very good especially when the sky is clearing up. I like the way you cannot remember which way to go, well written within the rain picture as a whole.

[Skye]

Thank you so much. :)

[Sam Gregory]

The last part is a really good way to end a poem, beautifully written. Keep it up :)

[Skye]

Thanks :) I was wondering if I should have drug it out more.

[Renée]

"Letting the rain kiss my cheeks as if they were tears of happiness"...what a sweet thought..completes it perfectly to me....

[Skye]

Thank you for the review. :)

[Renée]

My Pleasure Skye ( :

[A. V. Madison]

Cute. I love the way it's written.

"God, please help me!" I cry out,
The rain, amazingly, lightens up
I can see all that's before me
It's alive and its open
Even while the drops still fall
Suddenly it doesn't seem so grim

^^ My favourite part ^^

[Skye]

Thanks :)

[A. V. Madison]

Anytime.