Lonely Little Dove

 

 

The lonely dove it sits and waits

Quietly up in the tree

It watches lovers look their last

As each and every one embrace

It cooes so softly, no one hears

But one little girl

With blue bows in her hair

"Here little dovey."

She calls to it gently

But he dare not

Ruffle even a feather

The boat by the dock

Calls out its last warning

People scurry past

But the girl stays

There right by the dove

As it cooes so heartbrokenly

Author's Note

Reveiws are welcome. :)

Reviews

[Renée]

Very sweet & gentle

[Lina Grey]

awwww that's so cute :) I could imagine this perfectly, the poor little dove. beautiful poem ~em

[Cristina Moldoveanu]

Children eyes can see things so delicate and pure...your poem is so fragile and sweet, the link between dove and child is painted like in a watercolor. I like that blue color :)

[Skye]

Thanks so much for your review. :)

[Forever Hidden]

Beautiful! How can you write this? It's so............. BEAUTIFUL! But then, their is some sadness to this poem.

[Skye]

I wanted to do something different, apperantly, it turned out just fine. :) And thanks for the review.

[Forever Hidden]

You surely did! It did NOT turn out fine. It turned out great!!!!!'n

[Skye]

Lol, i'm glad you liked it. :)

[Forever Hidden]

When did you start writing? You don't have to reply if you don't want to I'm just curious.

[Skye]

In sixth grade. I'm going into tenth next year, so four years?

[Forever Hidden]

W-O-W! That's a long time! No wonder you write SO well!

[Skye]

Lol, well all I can say is that i've gotten much better then I used to be. :)

[Forever Hidden]

Even if I hadn't read your writing when you were in sixth grade, I still think it was pretty good. But I'm pretty sure you've improved too!

[Skye]

Oh I have, it makes me shudder then I think back to how I used to write. I have kept it though, just to remind me. :)

[Forever Hidden]

Was it that bad? ;)

[Forever Hidden]

IN THE FUTURE
Girl: Hey mom! Look at Skye's writine!
read more IN THE FUTURE
Girl: Hey mom! Look at Skye's writine!

Mom: Oh honey, its splendid! No wonder they put this in a museum. Too bad she passed away 100 years ago!

Girl: Can we look at her grave?

[Skye]

In my eyes, yes. My sentences were stupid, my mysteries were so obvious, the characters, generic. The emotions so uncomplicated. Not to mention my choice of words were horrible.

[Skye]

LOL, good to know what my future holds. :)

[Forever Hidden]

Mom: *Looks at child and gives her the evil eye*

Girl: Can we?

*People look at the mom*

Mom: Sure * Says in *evil* tone*

[Skye]

Looks like the mom would rather stay home. ;)

[Forever Hidden]

No. She hates graves and her daughter just asked if she could go see the grave. People were staring at her, so she said yes. ;)

I hope this is what your future holds!

[Skye]

Lol, yes where a girl is obsessed with my grave and is forcing her mother to go see it. I can't wait! (Obviously, since I'm dead.) :)

[Forever Hidden]

I hope your ghost won't scare her away! =) Plus, if you had a ghost, tell her not to stop writing!

[Forever Hidden]

Lol!

[Skye]

Wow, that would be a bit creepy. it would say I had a new book out and people would just look at each other..... :)

[Forever Hidden]

You don't have to put it out on earth. You can put it out on The Ghost Island where everyone would read it! Even me because I'm going to be dead too ( hopefully so I could read your writing ) ;)

[Skye]

Wow, I feel our conversation taking a bad turn. :) Let's make a deal, I'll keep writing on my book, and you can keep reading it. Okay? :D

[Forever Hidden]

Okay. I'm sorry! ;( :(

[Skye]

What do you mean? You didn't offend me, sweetie. Promise. :) On the contrary, I was finding it entertaining.

[Forever Hidden]

I'm sorry I brought the subject up. You did? Thanks!

[Skye]

No need to apologise, really. Even on Ghost Island i'll be writing, whether its on see through paper or in my mind. :)

[Forever Hidden]

:)

[Lina Grey]

So sweet. Everyone needs a friend, even a dove could use some love at times. I love the loyalty of the little girl and the innoncence of the entire piece. Brilliant. Thank you.

[....]

enjoyed this piece alot, nicely written

[Skye]

I'm glad you liked it. :)

[Dark Tower]

The emotions are expressed very nicely. Well written.

[Aeternal Oceanfire]

Sad and poignant! It is beautiful! I have a newer favorite!

[Skye]

You seem to have a new favorite every time I post a new poem. :)

[Aeternal Oceanfire]

Which can only be an indication that you are improving. Really it is a tremendous compliment, and a compliment from Loki is rare.

[Skye]

Lol, obviously, since he's a bad guy

[Aeternal Oceanfire]

Obviously...

[Skye]

I had to go check that I had spelled obviously, I wasn't sure if you were making fun of me. :P

[Aeternal Oceanfire]

I wasn't. Would you like me to?

[Skye]

No Thanks ^_^

[Aeternal Oceanfire]

Okey dokey.

[Arik]

A sad but touching piece, I think we can all relate to the dove at least once in our life.

[Skye]

Thank you for you're review, I appreciate it.

[The Watcher]

I can relate myself to the dove and it's feelings. Very beautiful poem Skye.

[Skye]

Thank you. :)