Fishing Village

the fewtch

lime wet air
wet hair
skin wet sides
of fingers
wet sides
he uses the cabbie's stink-um

look at the partner

dumb dough
eyes answer

he didn't do it
any of what
she asked
but look

look at the partner

strawed on lips
stink sweet blue

slap him dreaming
inside shorelines
and he'll find something

Reviews

[Sophie]

I'm drifting along with this one, I'm going to re-read but these words are so inspiring and intriguing I truly love it.

[The Twin Arenas]

Thanks, Sophie. Appreciate the read.

[alanwgraham]

can't quite decipher
but oh! how
the flow, of words,
perfectly conceived,
bears ripe fruit!
A treat!
Alan

[The Twin Arenas]

Thanks, Alan. It's about fishing.

[Olivia]

powerful description, and nice flow

[A Humble Poet]

I like that way the words flow easily as one reads them, the tempo is great. Nice job!

[charlie]

I really like the jargon in this - creates some interesting/cool phrasing, like "slap him dreaming" "stink sweet blue" "the cabby's stink-um" ...

The poem makes for an entertaining motion picture of story. Thanks for sharing - really nice stuff!

[Ruth]

This is quite thought provoking...some things are not recognised at times...really clever piece :)

[A.marie.speaks]

Nice flow. The tempo matches the subject.. its slow and thoughtful, just the way i feel while fishing. The first lines are my favorite. You chose the ending well.

[scarlynn]

This is very smart and sounds like a classic. Enjoyed reading this piece.

[Cory Barrett]

Thanks for the wake up call here.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

fishing for love, being dumbstruck, finding something while he gets wet with wistfulness because she's taken the bait and run...now he is in a different cove, dreaming again.